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Broken WithOut A thought

Broken without a thought, I lay here alone
There are so many things I used to know
Dancing dreams and a web of lies
The sound of tears my lullaby

Where do I go from here, and to where do I belong
I thought the trust between us had grown so strong
I thought I knew you, and I let you know me
Where did she come in, how did I not see?

I tried to smile and said I was okay
And you bought the lie I told you today
Moved on and shut down, laying in the dark
After all who can tell the truth in a broken heart

I wish I could figure this out
But for now I know without a doubt
I cannot think and I cannot sleep
After all you lied to me

Whispered promises just torn apart
Here's the truth of a broken heart
There's one question about our love I wish to know
Tell me darling, where did it go?

Author notes

5/15
I am just me. I really dont have anything to say. I laugh I cry I lie I yell. I dont like to fight but I aint scared to bleed. I am drawn to people who hurt me and I think way to much. Sometimes, I hurt myself more with my own thoughts than with others words.

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  • SandhyaSuri
    March 6

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    'Dancing dreams and a web of lies
    The sound of tears my lullaby'
    Oh my my...these were very very good lines...great movement and overall a very well-expressed piece.
    I am not a rhyme person and I get awed by people who can manage to put across what they want and still retain the rhythm.
    Good luck with the contest and thanks for entering.
    Cheers
    Sandy


  • GotLilt
    March 3
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    you described your feeling well!


  • HystericalHeart
    March 3

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    Nya, i like this. I like the Ryhm and rhythm ((I don't think i spelt that right..)) But yes, it was pretty.
    ^-^


  • Schinosky
    March 3

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    I liked it, it flowed really nicely. There was that spelling error. It said trsut. I'm sure it was just a slip up though. It's good


    • HisFavoriteMistake
      March 3
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      Thank you. Yeah, I just corrected that. I have a very commited love affair with typos it seems. Highly annoying. But again, thank you for the comment. I truly appreciate it. I wasn't to sure how it would sound to outside ears.
      Truth In Southern Ink,
      Chelsea

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