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When in need

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Little star

of fishy smell lies

gasping air

all puckered,

bereft of tides to thwart heat,

sweaty and flustered.

 

His vision

was quite dizzy, as

the heat rose

from his bed,

searing five wee tentacles

deeper shades of red.

 

At last, sweet

dreams took over mind

and shade had

found his form,

‘neath strong wings of albatross

wandering the shore.

 

Spying star

upon the strand, he

quickly stops

and stares, then

pulls a jug from under wings,

placing it with care

 

within reach

of baked bright arms, so

thirst could end

for new found

friend, who’d soon be wet again,

tide was coming in.

 

So if you

find while wandering

another

soul in need,

do what you can to help them,

be a friend indeed!

         

Author notes

Lessons in life come from the silliest of places.
Written in the Shadorma form (6 lines with syllable count 353375) doesn't have to rhyme, but I couldn't help myself. I hope you enjoy

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  • liltulip gold member
    March 18

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    sweet!

    i love the prompt of this contest and your take on it with the words you have written here! thanks for sharing this with us!


  • Jesann gold member
    March 16

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    Delightful !!
    A great take on the prompt.
    Love the little lesson of kindness in there.
    Very well done.


  • Samplette gold member
    March 14

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    Excellent little write here. Great imagery and story line. I enjoyed. Thank you for entering the Contest.
    Sam


  • Emmyb gold member
    March 6

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    hehe

    this is cute and a great way to give out a positive message. great write once again. i am enjoying this poem immensely.

    Emma


  • Legend silver member
    March 4

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    As you say lessons in life come from some funny places.We only have to look for them Never seen this form before, ( but then again there are many i know not) The subtle little rhyme you slipped in could go unnoticed if not read correctly Well done A most enjoyable form and poem Good luck in the contest

    • Sandi Alford gold member
      March 5
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      Thank you Legend, it's a pleasure to hear from you today,
      your thoughts are most appreciated my friend

      blessings, Sandi

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