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I Bleed Just To Know I'm Alive

 

I can't stand to open my eyes
After a night filled landscape
Of love with you in my mind
Only to find that you aren't
Any where to be found

 

My eyes are filled with salty
Tears that are needing to be
Let loose, but can't seem
To find the hole to drain
Your damage away

 

I'm ready to scream but can't
Seem to find my voice because
Your love has seemed to clog
My wavering trust in my own
Personal ability to think

 

My heart has become a hole
That's shattered deeper each
Time you call me and give me
Just a minute of your time,
Yet I'm left here alone

 

I don't know which way I'm
Going, and it seems that you
Like it when you know that
I am here just bleeding to
Know that I'm still alive

Author notes

Option 1: Titles---v. I Bleed Just To Know I'm Alive

Option 2: Quotes---ii. Where you used to be, there is a hole in the world, which I find myself constantly walking around in the daytime, and falling in at night. I miss you like hell. ~Edna St. Vincent Millay

The title really got me and stroked my poetic musings but I couldn't seem to find words to put together until after I read this quote and then it jost flowed all together. That is why I credit both options to my work.

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  • midnight-tears
    May 22
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    do u like the goo goo dolls by any chance i havent published anything yet gr8 poem luv it


  • glenn shannon silver member
    April 17

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    yes i relate to this one its a damning feeling to be someones toy , discarded till they feel the urge use again. chin up pet, your loved by many

  • stephenlocke
    April 6

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    This is a very beautifully written piece of creative writing.
    I love the constant metaphores, that almost seem the motif of this piece. I Iike how love brings all these different thoughts and feelings out in you.
    This is a very good piece, i really enjoyed reading it


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    March 26
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    Very meaningfully sad, but beautifully written


  • Mozarts funeral gold member
    March 24

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    I love the title. I think I've used that in a few of my poems. It's actually a sad state when titles like that become popular hits or when someone can relate to it. But I suppose life can't all be sunshine and bunnies. It can be taken so many ways, not just about love, and that is a true talent.


  • BadazzGangsta
    March 21
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    this is really good....it flows so well...nice work and good luck in the contest


  • PureRomance
    March 17

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    I agree with the previous posters. You did an amazing job with this brilliant masterpiece. Best of luck to you and your poem in the contest. Keep up the excellent work and God bless you always in all that you do and write. I'm sorry that you feel like this. You expressed your emotions very vividly though. Keep that ink flowing.


  • TaintedLoveSong
    March 11

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    Wow. Your work is so well. You can take a prompt and make the most beautiful thing out of it. Again. Thank you for writing this.


  • Re-invention silver member
    March 8

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    nicely done hunni! this is beautifully sad and personal... I am glad my prompts inspired you this welll... thank you for entering!


  • xxSerendipityxx
    March 3
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    this is really good best of luck in the contests!

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