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Sharp Pencil.


  She sways
  on the breeze;
  a blank
  page

  He waits
  with pencil;
  sharpened.

 
     

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  • shattered.frisco
    October 20
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    cult following? good god i said some stupid stuff. but i do feel like you wanted to say more


  • movedon
    March 3

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    gah i feel like there should be so much more, but there shouldnt be! i loved it! I see your cult following has beat me to the punch of commenting first!


  • BrokenSanity
    March 3

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    *Insert dramatic music* Very... intriguing... what inspired this? I like it. short, to the point and has an effective effect. (...Does that make sense??) Lol. Anyway, well done, keep the pen swaying!


  • Tqop
    March 3

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    Brilliantly Done:

    Very abstract.
    I love the opening lines.
    It is very beautiful. At times it can be difficult to find the right thought. And in the process you've captured a beautiful thought.
    Well done mate.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    March 2
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    interesting and very abstract

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