No is not an easy word
that I've learned to use very well
Thanks to that inadequacy
sometimes life is a living hell
Yet still no wouldn't come to me
maybe my love for you too fierce
Accustomed to surving on bare minimum
while together we wasted away years
Hurling heartaches and headaches,
you've heaped horrors upon my soul
Kept pushing me down until I found
I had no choice but to take control
That which don't come easily
sometimes is worth all it's weight in gold
Like a perfectly polished nugget
provided as payback by the powers of no...
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- expectations by Majija.
550 points, ended March 7, 10 entries
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Nice poem. I especially like these two separated lines:
"No is not an easy word"
"Accustomed to surving on bare minimum"
Somehow these two lines just talk to me. They content some true I believe. Life isn't always easy as it seems. -
NO! boy, did you do that!!!! Great piece!!!!
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Wonderfully written...
The rhyme and flow is very good, and your NO is expressed well
Be blessed in all you do.
Tony
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Well said, indeed
"No" isn't as fun as saying "Yes."
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Very good, and very true as well. Keep up the good work.
~ Chelsey
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Very good, no can be a very hard word, but also can have poitive power. Your message is clear and your writting is smooth great job.
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I understand your motive
Very interesting thought process you have here. The poem moves rather swiftly from idea to idea, however, not so much from rhyme to rhyme. I felt as if the rhyme was forced in some places such as "gold" and "no." Perhaps you should arrange the positioning of the words so that the words that do rhyme well together seem accidental. -
I agree no can be a hard word for me to get my tongue around too but sometimes it has to be done.
I think you communicated your message very well in this, It was simple but effective. Thanks for sharing.
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