Archaic and introverted thoughts propound!
Screaming yet seeking that they be drowned
Fruitless in nature, rather barren in design
Nevertheless the true content is rather benign
Why is it I can only hear this melodic sound?
Archaic and introverted thoughts propound!
Calmness and calamity together they dance
Eagerness, serenity searching for a second glance
A quick smirk, perhaps it was coyly clowned?
Perceptive, peaceful reprieve I seek to ground
Yet time only inhibits this mind tightly wound
Archaic and introverted thoughts propound!
Who actually knows, comment at will
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This one has left me rather speechless. "Calmness and calamity together they dance," this was friggin amazing. I loved this, and the rhyme and flow was perfect. Excellent job on this. I love it.
becca
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Old and new thoughts reverberate indeed!
Hey, I was waiting for others also to comment mostly because after I have written it is fun to see what others have said. Where ARE they?
To be first is not fair to either of us!
Time DOES inhibit, no kidding!
We have here a picture of indecision, caused by opposing actions, opposite effects, opposite situations each cancelling their forces, and of course they inhibit! How could it be otherwise?
The single lines remind that you knew it all the time.
It is tightly written with all words needed, the rhyme ties it all together, making the dance-glance couplet stand out uniquely as a focal point in this situation.
Generally, there is nothing here that needs improving.
Great job!
Terry
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