Trip-Trap

I wish I could fall through

society's slivered conformity

and drift past China

into outer-space,

I'm surprised the earth's centre

didn't scald me.

I guess I just have

thick skin.

But even Jupiter

wasn't far enough for me.

I just want to run

so far away.

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Crazy Quicky! by luna-midnight. 500 points, ended March 3, 2009, 6 entries
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Dragonbabyx3
March 8, 2009

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beautiful and amazing! I absolutely loved this piece! On the third stanza, did you mean for "ever" to be "even"? Just wondering! a well deserved gold!
- February Moon
  March 8, 2009
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  Yes it's supposed to be that. Thank you.
raw love
March 7, 2009
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there's just something about the way you say it.... it's good. And I like it.
Whyitt U
March 3, 2009

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Congrats on the well desevered gold...I love the use of outer-space and planets. Excellent!!

wyattxxx
CaliOkie
March 3, 2009

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Well deserved gold. This speaks to the awkward yearning of the soul to be free, to slip the bonds, so to speak. Out past Jupiter are the stars on which we wish at night. Made of star-stuff, we long to return to the stars.

Excellent. Very thought provoking.

Garrison
luna-midnight
March 3, 2009

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i really loved the last stanza....i'm so sleepy...i've been restless, hence the prompt. and this is very good. thanks for entering. and good luck
Stephanie ♥
charcoal
March 2, 2009
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so good
ShadowsMidnightRose
March 2, 2009
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This was beautiful, truly a stunning piece.

Good luck
crimsondew
March 2, 2009
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Wonderful imagery..feelings excellently portrayed...enjoyed the read much!