Passages through time
no longer paved with gold
the millstone of life
leaves soul heavy and cold.
Fantasies fractured
by realities grip
faith takes a tumble
hope starts to slip.
Battered and broken
belief all but gone
till light casts the shadows
with the rising of dawn.
Author notes
prompt 1: http://moroka323.deviantart.com/art/The-Fallen-114460695
47 Words.
Meh things always seem worse at night..lol.
A contest entry
- ~ The Quickening ~ 2 by Mariana.
400 points, ended March 3, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I can see who calls cos I'm nosy, so be nice and comment.
Comments
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I like that a lot. The poem goes down, down, down then soars sharply up like a diving bird sweeping to the sky again.
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Oh my not only are you a true talent with the BG but you have a wonderful way with words.
This is amazing
such imagery
Congrats on the gold.
well deserved
Fire
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Love this!
Congrats on the well-deserved Gold!
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Woot!!! Gold
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This is so beautifully written...I love the imagery and metaphors expressed. Well done!
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
Mariana
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I love the imagery on your write. It goes so well with the picture prompt.
Best of luck in the contest, hun
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It's true things do seem worse
at night, even fevers get higher
Never heard it put so eloquently
before !
Fantastic piece!
Good luck in the contest!
~Pastel
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aw wow a wonderful poem I loved this your imagery and depth is wonderful throughout good luck in the contest hun
maralisa
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Love it !!
Damn that's a cool pic and love your take on it hunny.. such a desolate feeling of hope lost here!
Yep, night can makethings worse.. but it also produces awesome writing
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Very nice take on the picture prompt, well done.
Wonderful....Best wishes in the contest
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You penned this with such feelings that are both vivid and true
a great strong write
I felt this way before
Best wishes to you hun
Love Julie
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wow. another masterpiece. great job with this. the picture prompt is interesting and i like seeing where you got the flow of thoughts from. amazing. good luck in the contest although you don't need it
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