This is the story of a girl.
but not a child.
She was old,
when she was young.
She did everything she could,
even when she knew,
it wasn't good enough.
My girl fought her battles,
in her never ending war.
She stood strong,
even with no end in sight.
My girl never followed through,
on the days that she said die.
My girl's always been a fighter.
This is the story of a girl,
who's standing at a crossroads,
trying to take the right path,
this time.
It's time for me to stop this godless war,
I can only ever lose.
My next chapter is going to be on my terms, not theirs.
A contest entry
- 178 TITLES CONTEST!!!! that's right.. 178 to choose from!! I'm sure you can find atleast a little inspiration :) by Angierie.
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Critiques?
Comments
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I really like this. I like the oxymorons and juxtapositions. The ending is very powerful. Your diction could have been better chosen I think in certain places but overall I really did enjoy it. Good job and good luck! ~Des
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This was powerful. I really liked the way you began this with how the girl was old when she was young. I felt I could relate to it, like those words described me. I've always felt older in life and sometimes feel as though I'm waiting in some aspects for people in my age group to catch up, not everyone, but some people. I also liked the way you ended this. It's something that I think a lot of people can relate to, having to choose a path in life. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Haley Mary
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