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Ive come to terms with the fact that i wont be here very soon  
im leaving for a distant place that's miles away from you
your fame based dreams and repetitive routines always put me down
you wear my wages on your wrist and like a sheep i follow you around



and around i go, following you around we go
you have to be one up so you don't have to look like us
cause were so low, in your eyes, so low in your eyes
your gold dust in your eyes but your a pain in the ass in mine.


>
Why couldent you just take minute to realise
That you could be so much better
dont come to me when your on your kness and your losing grip
cause i wont be there, i wont be there
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Ive come to terms with the fact that i wont be here very soon
im leaving for a distant place thats miles away from yo
your fame based dreams and repetitve routines always put me dow
you wear my wages on your wrist and like a sheep i follow you around


and around i go, followng you around we go
when your on your ass ill say i told you so
you aquaint yourself with the wrong clientel
and a start a war, that you cant deal with yourself




>
Why couldent you just take minute to realise
That your putting stress, on my life
dont come to me when your on your kness and your losing your mind
cause i wont be there, cause youd never be there
<


Im Losing My Mind
Im Losing My Mind
You See yourself in Spotlights
but youll never be in mine



*Guitar Solo*




Why couldent you just take minute to realise
that your drunk on fame in the camera flashes of your life
Dont cry for me when the hangover sets in
just take something for the pain, and learn that you wont win.

 

 

Rob

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i wrote this song for my band, its about a guy i know

I Wrote it for my band... Jus wondered what people thought...

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    March 4

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    Welcome to AllPoetry!

    This is a great poem - I really like the way that you have expressed your emotion in this way, I don't know much about lyrics, but these sound good to me my favourite part was the ending - it has a great tone of exasperation I think from a constructive criticism point you might like to look at the spelling and punctuation, but that is more presentation wise than anything structural I enjoyed this poem!

    Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!


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  • LionessK silver member
    March 3

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    welcome to allpoetry

    You have a really good rhythm going here. I would like to hear the music you had in mind for it.
    I enjoyed the read.
    Keep writing on and enjoy the site.