It was a matter of following passion’s compass,
between one who thought gold lied beneath the silt in the heart
and another who felt there was a sky we could touch together,
neither described my real condition,
nor the truth that dwelt within,
for in my soil were rocks and weeds along with a few uncut stones,
never did have wings to fly.
But it was confusing
since both choices were so unfamiliar,
like a man left on a deserted island for years,
suddenly brought to a city,
hard to appreciate the option of luxury or comfort
if all the recollections were of dwelling in a cave.
So I followed the quest for nuggets,
until none where found,
then lost my chance to have the other person
show me where a ladder might be located.
Living now more happy than in those days
because I look for what is really me
instead of somebody else’s interpretation.
Author notes
I want you to write me a poem about expectations. Have you ever made a choice because other had expectation to you? Or because you yourself had high expectation to yourself?
A contest entry
- expectations by Majija.
550 points, ended March 7, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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surperb
a brilliant realistic description of the truth in situations requiring choice that most experience but are incapable of narrowing to the the honest simplicity this wonderful poem has.
One observation:in the line "So I followed the quest for nuggets, until none where found..." The "until none where found" works but is confusing - perhaps 'until none were found' or 'where none were found' - just a no big deal suggestion - great write - billpoet
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Really nice poem. Well written and I like your comparison in second stanza. And I really like your ending:
"Living now more happy than in those days
because I look for what is really me
instead of somebody else’s interpretation"
Wise words. It should be 100 % our own life we live, but interpretation/expectations can make that hard.
Well done
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Oh yes!...What an inspirational and liberating write!
We were not made to be made over in some departments.. If God wanted us to be something else, he would have made us that way...Alterations maybe in our character which He is a specialist at...but the real you in your spirit is you....Thank you for sharing!
write! 
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Excellent! And good on you for being yourself. You have certainly struggled through the years.
Best wishes in the contest.
Gaylene
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What a read! you take us on a maze of emotions, and thoughts through known and unknown... WOW!You did a great job on this one! I love it!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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The reader invited through a maze of emotions of what is unknown and unsure, accepting what reality satisifys the narrator, rather than rising to expection from others outlook. Wonderful ending to decide what make oneself happy as opposed to others
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