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Juliet Deciduous

Fine aura of untouched divinity
cultivated into ornamental beauty.
Blossoming brilliance bites
fiercely into angry frost,
conquering my verdant forest.

   Tears ravage my face:

         why did you vanish in winter?

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Prompt: Magnolia
30 Words exxxxactly (i hope )
please take time to try and uncover this one...

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  • Antebellum
    July 5, 2009
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    Thanks so much for entering.

    [if you end up in the finals I will comment better]


  • ItaloEtkin
    April 7, 2009
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    wow.. so much inner beauty


  • paperparadox silver member
    April 4, 2009

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    A fitting tribute to beauty

    I like the 'angry frost' notion preceded by 'bites'...great linkage of imagery here.

    An enjoyable trip into your mind's poetic eye. Well done!


  • Darkend
    March 7, 2009
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    Short and brilliant. The word choic is simply fantastic and captivating. Well done!


  • HannahHarlet
    March 3, 2009
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    wow

    enchanting its very lovely!

    Forever and always,
    eclipser18


  • novacaine.
    March 3, 2009
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    this is beautiful.


  • xXLifelessLindseyxX
    March 2, 2009
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    such a great write;; short but still amazing


  • Darkwell
    March 2, 2009

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    Mmmmm double rewards thats like a double chokolate brownie

    This is really a lovely piece. It's like flowers but it's also like love like life cycles and how even love or relationships are born to be disiduous. I really like your word choices, they're very visual and full spectrum from blossoming to biting untouched to conquered, yummm. i love it ending on the question too.


  • xxSerendipityxx
    March 2, 2009
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    This is a great write, good luck in the contest!!!!


  • pinksnowboots
    March 2, 2009
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    Haha this is cute. I like the description of a tree.


  • A. Rose
    March 2, 2009

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    Wow, this is so beautiful! Having it so short is what makes it so amazing.

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