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[ Beautiful places ]

Beautiful places
And beautiful lies
While all you can do is wonder
Who put all this love in your head
And all this nonsence in your heart
Take a quick second
And think it through
The words they slow
And touches friquent
So is this really how you want it
Meaningless nothings
And lovely little whispers
That can drive you crazy
So did we make the right choise
In spending our days
The way we do
So are we ready
To do this dance again

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  • MusicIsMyLifeline
    March 3

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    verrgooodverrgoood

    Fave part : "While all you can do is wonder
    Who put all this love in your head
    And all this nonsence in your heart"

    "The words they slow" <---good line, but the words sound kind of awkward, unless you were going for the gansta type talk. hahaha.