He stands alone,
Against a world unknown,
A beaten and bruised soul.
I catch my breath,
Fearing the death,
Of a heart that was never whole.
An eye to catch,
Arms are outstretched,
He needs what I console.
I throw a smile,
To cover up,
The bruise that is my pain.
He walks away,
Can't see him cry,
For he walks in the rain.
I want to hold him,
Within my arms,
Where he'll forever remain.
My aching heart is thunder,
A life of endless wonder,
From my soul the hope has drained.
A love that he is needing,
Beneath a heart that's bleeding,
A smile he's painted on.
At last the rain has subsided,
He stands, a choice decided,
All the pain foregone.
I love until the world will end,
Forever is what I intend,
To rest my love upon.
Though, it is a man's choice,
His passive voice,
To agree or disagree.
Between now and then,
Until our world will end,
I'll be loving him,
Love, me
A contest entry
- In Her--His--shoes by bluecollarlove.
1900 points, ended March 24, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thoughts?
Comments
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Beautifully done.
Very touching.
Love your title and last 2 lines.
Very well done.
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this brought a tear to my eye. very beautiful write!
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AWESOME!!!
this is truely amazing. I love the prompt and your take on it. your words are perfect and the style that you used really works well for this poem! I don't think that i can think of a single thing that i dont like about it
for one of the first times on all poetry a poem has left me speechless for a while. I hope that you do very well in this contest that you entered the poem into. you have inspired me and i hope that others will respect this as much as i do
5 stars on the poem, and keep on doin what ur doin
<3
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I love it! It's amazing! As usual. Mean. xP lol
Anyway, I can't give a very thought-out response--I'm in school. XD
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**read 'my' poem
I don't speak with an Irish accent here
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Aww...you don't speak with an Irish accent?? That's sad. : ( Irish accents are AWESOMEEEE. lol
But yes, I write in school. XD I used to all the time, but not so much anymore. I think there are still a lot of poems I haven't posted on here. Hehe. ^.^ lol
Oh, and you're welcome for risking my life to read your poem!! lol It was definitely worth it. ^.^
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Hahaha.
I do that sometimes.
Write is school.
My mom would kill me if she found out, though
Well, thank you Brandi for taking your risks and time in school to read me poem.
Hahaha yeah right.
-cyber hug--
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You really like it? Thank you so much!
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This is really beautiful!
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