Exile
i never thought you would return
on the day my world lost its sun
and that no light would ever burn
leaving this eternal winter undone
so i lied in the darkest darkness
coveting a colder darkness still
worshipping an unwanting goddess
from whom you eased my fevered ill
but time comes for all things to die
for nothing could ever last forever
and when i accepted my faith was a lie
dead were all my reasons to endeavour
no i did not think of you
on the day i slit my wrist
yes im sorry but it's true
you weren't someone i missed
you'd already been gone for so long
and i no longer wanted to miss you
so i tried my hardest to be strong
forgetting you were someone i knew
yet nothing can ever last forever
not even desired estrangement
when nothing more held you together
our worlds were once more tangent
now every thought i think is of you
and every moment is ever so lonely
i can't kill this feeling reborn anew
no matter how slowly it's killing me
as i begin to feel your warmth once again
you are already beginning to fade away
my heart longs knowing it will be forsaken
but still i fall to my knees and pray
Author notes
Seumni Esmuin (no translation included)
Comments
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wow i really liked this one great job
keep up the good work
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this is really good i liked it
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Heh...
Pegged me.
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Really now?
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Wow. This is something a lot of people can really relate to, sadly. It's almost....dare I say romantic? in a dark way. It has an amazing ryhme and flow.
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If there is a romantic sentiment to missing someone through longing lament, than you are quite right.
Thanks for the read, comment and applause.
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sad. nice title by the way. lol
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this poem like the others are fantastic and wonderfully written, i like the stanza
now every thought i think is of you
and every moment is ever so lonely
i can't kill this feeling reborn anew
no matter how slowly it's killing me
because i cann relate to it and it is very strong. An excellent write
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Thanks again.
Sucks that you understand these feelings, I so dearly hate them and the way they make me feel. -
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Your welcome and yes it sucks the way they make you feel
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i have a strong feeling dark spirit girl is the flame in your heart , love is as tangling as a spiders web in the tree of life , your poems are a cry for love , sometimes crys go unheard , some spiders even pleasure in the pain they inflict, dont go to the center of the web friend, find another less fatal attraction, like your work tho
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No, I do not know her beyond reading a few of her poems and messaging a little back and forth talking about our writes.
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Wow. Incredibly written, emotion packed, dark and magnificent.. Wonderful write.
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Awsome. this is your best one yet, in my opinion.
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Unlike you
but very dark and brillant nonetheless. The words flowed like wings swiftly through a bright blue sky!!! If that made any sense. OMGOODNESS I found out that I may have this strange desiease where I hallucinate all the time...this means I'm not retarded lol no wonder I'm so fucked up. I thought I should add that...for some reason ^~! I miss reading your works and talking to you on a daily basis ya know!!! This poem is so romantic and yet bitter...I love the mixture because mostly that line I slit my wrists but didn't think of you made me picture something very morbid ^~! lol I think you meant for us to do that no? Either way I'm kinda in a haze like today...and you should join me soon MR!!!
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Join you in a hulucinating haze huh...sounds fun.
Funny, only you would see romance in solitude, like finding beauty in darkness and adoration in monstrosity, but that's what's cool about ya.
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hee hee Ur the best!!!
yeah I find beauty in weird places...like for some reason no one truelly understands but to be accepted just the same rocks
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I like this. It's filled with emotions that paint pictures for my mind.
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wow amazing
I can see the whole emo thing but that doesnt seem to be you, I read this 4 times b4 commenting on it, keep up the good work, you are a great writer and Im glad I read this
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Wickedly Painful
Beautiful and painful at the same time. I feel your passion, pain and longing for that special you inside another. Muchas gracias!!!
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I really love this one I had to re read it
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Wow! This is really freaking cool! I love the descriptive beauty you have added to your sorrow! This is a real tear jerker! If I cried I would cry for you. As it stands however.... lol. This has a great rhythm too. I read it out loud and it sounds awesome!
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I don't even cry for myself, there is surely no need for anyone else to.
But thanks for the read...and the re-read I see too
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*tears up*
This is so very deep, showing your sarrow and yet your streangth. I hope your okay. i loved this it flows nicely.
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Because I slit my wrist once upon a time and I would like to say "no i did not think of you on the day i slit my wrist, yes im sorry but its true, you werent someone i missed" to one or two people who think that i did it because of them. I just like the lines Xds-gX
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Hmm...the fourth stanza is my favourite. I would like to say that to a few people. The last stanza ends the piece off well. Alot of people happen to like dark poems Great write! Xds-gX
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The fourth huh?
That's actually the first two lines (made into four) of this piece that existed as I started putting thoughts into words and decided to begin writting this.
Why is that one your favorite?
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This makes me cry .I know your talking about that girl .It's really painful piece ,especially when one knows it's true .I shouldn't read your poems cause they make me sad ,but can't help but read them .
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Don't feel bad.
It isn't trouble for you to find.
I will be alright someday, I promise
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"I never thought you would return ... I accepted my faith was a lie .... I no longer wanted to miss you".
I've thought the same words.
Good write!!!
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