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Maybe you See it, Maybe you..

On a pile of distorted rubbish
meaning centers on the stench
of underlining intent

Meanwhile precious ephiphanies
lose their flavor for lack
of perceptive indulgence

As the saying goes,
ever learning but never coming
to the knowledge of the truth

Oh well! I guess it's
the same old song being played,
"Can't see the forest for the tree's."

Author notes

C5: Read between the lines.

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  • Barbara gold member
    March 4

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    Interesting poem and take on one of the prompts given. The flow was good, although the lack of punctuation in some parts made the reading difficult at times. Natural pauses at the end of lines stilted the meaning that was connected to the following. (Last word... The 'tree's' what? (trees?.. tree's would mean something of the tree) Interesting second stanza... I like the thoughts that bring up... definite reading between the lines there


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 2

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    thank you for sharing this with me today. you have done a fantastic job on this. i wish you well in this contest that you have entered and am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie


  • skitza
    March 2
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    Every line is interesting - from beginning to end. My new flat has a garden. Maybe this one will win... or MAYBE my new flat has a garden. People can stop asking me if my dogs have got a big garden now. And they will stop looking at me like I neglect my dogs when I say NO.
    Read between the lines. Maybe, I will.