parasailing winds drift us apart,
distance may seem great aswell as race,
but us being truly different is not the case,
Relinquishing mounds of guns and fear,
may be where you dwell,
but with faith and love you will rise from this hell,
There is beauty all around in every inch of dirt,
Just reach out your hand and touch the stream of divinity,
And you will see people pulling away other from infamy,
Although we may be strangers I am a kind human,
I am here to warm your heart, and cool your head,
keep you safe and let your hunger be fed,
we are strangers, but I love you
Author notes
Is about the love and charity people have for others who they may not even know, and wish to help them as best they can
A contest entry
- Random Options by Simply Simple.
1200 points, ended March 27, 2009, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Soundly written
This verse shows you have deeply held values about reaching out and helping people in need.
I have one suggestion if you are interested in a critique, that is Verse 3, Line 3, find a substitue for "infinity"; e.g., "And you will see people pulling others away from infamy".
in·fa·my (ĭn'fə-mē
n. pl. in·fa·mies
Evil fame or reputation.
The condition of being infamous.
An evil or criminal act that is publicly known.
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Thankyou for your wonderful suggestion!!! i appreciate all your input and comments very much. Your line you suggested is perfect, and very powerful and compelling. I kind of just used your example i hope you are ok with that? it just seemed to fit exceptionally.
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Intersting. Different. A very odd ending, but I liked it.
Thanks for sharing.
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Wow
I love this poem it's very loving Have a nice day!
Lana
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you too thanks for the comment
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As well as it should be, reaching out to all creation, touching write. Blessings.
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thankyou!
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Nicely done with a very warm message. Good work!
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Thankyou!!!! so much i appreciate it
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'Suffer little children to come unto thee'
Not exact;y namaste but a lovely poem anyway/ Well done and all the best in the contest.
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Thanks for your comment But i do think it relates to the contest. It was too show uplifting hope for the world and positive thoughts. The meaning of this poem is too show that people are looking after one another no matter what other terrible things are happening in the world. These charities are a example
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You are a lovely poet and your poem is very nice. maybe you would like to join our group. it's called THE SECRET LAW OF ATTRACTION.
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Wow, this really should win - it was amazing, I truly enjoyed it .... I liked the way you used the photo to the max. Really amazing.
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thankyou so much, im glad you liked it. I often think about people who are in horrible situations im glad i could express it.
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