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Me And You

I'm the bow, you’re the tie
I'm the tear, you’re the cry
I'm the laugh, you’re the sigh
Im a cheat, your a lie
           
I'm the candle, you’re the cake
I'm real, you’re fake
I'm the sea, you’re the lake
I'm the snail, you’re the snake

I'm the feet, you’re the toes
I'm the smell, you’re the nose
I'm the water, you’re the hose
I'm the grass, you’re the rose

I'm the socks, you’re the shoe
I'm the spoon, you’re the stew
I'm the cough, you’re the flu
I'm me and you’re you

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  • The Wayword Warrior
    March 3

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    hey lana I love the idea of this one, putting things that go togther well to show how well two people fit like a hand and glove. But I think you could change the last line because it suggests there is a seperation between me and you. How about "You're in me and i'm in you" which grasps the relatedness between us and matches the meaning of your poem. Lurrrrve Yaw!


  • lolagirl
    March 2

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    oh wow! what a great poem for a 11 year old!!!!!! bravo! i love it


  • GothicFyre
    March 2

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    I do like it in fact I loved it! Lovely internal rhyme, it really did have beauty and charm about it. Truly beautiful.

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    March 2
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    Sounds to me like this is dedicated to your best friend. Very good Lana. I enjoyed it.
    Brian

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