We sit at dinner as
the violoncellist drags their
bow across the strings in an
eerie manner.
Causing spinal fluids
to rise to our ears,
macerating our ear drums.
The rancor sound takes ahold
of our senses, as
quadriplegia sets in.
A few more viprish pulls
of the bow across the
viridescent strings, and
our minds meander into
an uneven qualmy sleep.
The lucid dreams sprang
to life inside our skulls,
yet surreally like reality.
The cello now played a
sultry waltz in our subconcious.
I could feel my body sway
to the music, as sensuality set in.
I let my thoughts enter
into a raffish mood, as I hear you
moan in unexpected pain.
A squeal of a last breath,
your final bought of disentience.
Then I realize the music has
stopped playing and the bow held to my throat.
Unable to move, I can only feel
the razor edge of
the enhanced bow.
I take my final gasping breath
as the musician slits my throat.
Author notes
No joke this was the nightmare I had last night. no fancy dining for me for a very long time
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ewww scary
don't get me going on drems. Nicely done NIc
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Lol... My dreams are always bad lol
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Good creepy imagery and creative imagination. Alot of aliteration throughout which was nice to see. Keep writing.
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Thank you!!!
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Oh my gosh! This read so nicely, flowing right along. So much so that the last line totally caught me off guard! Wow.. what a dream. But out of it did come a really good write! Thank you. and hope your next sleep is sweet. *smiles*
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My dreams have been better
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Wow! This is an insane dream! Freaked me out alittle and gave me chills. I won't think of my cello the same way again when I play. This is a great piece with a nice choice of words. I had to look a few of them up. This was a wonderful write and very dark. Hope I don't have a nightmare tonight!
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I read too much... Reason why my vocab is so large. Thank you for the read
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no problem, this was a good read. You can never read to much or have to large of a vocabulary. Plus I learned a few new words!
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this is a crazy nightmare....
i've had some crazy ones they creep me out
great piece i love the flow and how smart it is....
great piece..... ..... thanks so much for sharing
your Faerie
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Im glad you liked it
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Spooky, very spooky (I'ver heard that celloists can be dangerous and deadly!) the poem is even more bizarre as it was a dream....
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Yeah... The night of the dream I had gone to an awful orchestra concert
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This is scary. I prefer now to eat at home lol. Beautifully written nightmare.
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Many of the so called experts claim our dreams are our subconcious minds attempting to contact us. This is an excellent write, I can see the event taking place from a table nearby. I often write from dreams, "Dreamscape" being the one I still have not quite figured out. Congrats on an excellent write, however, I am a bit uncertain as to some of the words you use.
viridescent?:iridicent
sentuality?:sensuality
disentience?: no idea
A question though; did you die in the dream or did it end when the bow sliced? I have never actually died in a dream, just wondering.
Peace
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I died in the dream, I always die in my nightmares
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You caught a spellining error thank you!!
viridecent means green.
Disentience means to argue or fight back
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This is amazing. Though this nightmare is something only you have seen, you were able to bring it out so well. I like this. I like this a LOT. Great job.
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Thank you. Lately my nightmares have been way too vivid.
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Ohhhh what an awsome dream, really spooky, i like the way you have penned this, and the ending is fab, i love having freaky dreams lol!!!!! by the way Hello. xx
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how have you been??!! Ive missed you
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Crikey mate, it was beautiful and really great and dark. sent shivers down my spine. Amazing.
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try having it as a nightmare
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"A few more viprish pulls
of the bow across the
viridescent strings, and
our minds meander into
an uneven qualmy sleep."Haha! Oh, this is very entertaining Dani, really nice diction too!
Love,
mj.
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Thanks. I had fun writing this one
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