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Glory bound - Shadorma form

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Come sail with

me ‘cross breadth of sea

beyond life’s

mortal reign,

with love and faith as guides, past

comprehension’s plane.

 

These canvas

sails will never fail

as long as

faith is near,

for the ledge of reckoning

beckons, Glory cheers!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Since I came up with this form for the contest, I thought I'd give it a go.

Picture credit : Final Frontier Voyage by George Grie

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  • JinSays gold member
    March 19

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    I saw your contest featuring this form.
    I eyed this painting too, for some time. Having virtually no confidence in my abilities these days, I slunk away, pretended I couldnt do it.
    Im hopelessly oppositionally defiant you see, and to actually attempt to write in form goes against everything I stand for.
    Yeah okay, so I knew my contribution would not be this fantastic.
    Can you win your own contests?
    just kidding, you should at least get an HM
    Love,
    jin


    • Sandi Alford gold member
      March 21
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      awww thank you Jin for your kind thoughts on this scribble, I truly appreciate it

      love and blessings, Sandi

  • Judith Chandler
    March 9
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    "the ledge of reckoning". I like the grace of this form and what you have said here.


    • Sandi Alford gold member
      March 18
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      Thank you Judith, I appreciate your kind thoughts and time spent with my scribbles

      Many blessings, Sandi


  • ronnica
    March 8
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    Oh so beautifully penned , it flowed over me,


    • Sandi Alford gold member
      March 18
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      Thank you Ronnica, I appreciate your time and very kind thoughts left behind

      many blessings, Sandi


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    March 3

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    I am very impressed that you successfully combined a rigid syllable count with rhyme. This is a wonderful example of this form. I also love it when the contest judge feels inspired by her own theme. Very well done. Peace, Liz

    • Sandi Alford gold member
      March 4
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      Thank you Liz, I appreciate your kind thoughts

      I often write something for my own contests, if it doesn't inspire me, would it inspire others? one never knows

      Thanks again!
      many blessings, Sandi


  • longte
    March 3
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    I will have to play with this style
    Looks like good fun
    I take it it is a sylable count?

    • Sandi Alford gold member
      March 4
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      It is a lot of fun

      We have a contest running right now for this form.

      6 line stanza with syllable counts respective for the lines
      3
      5
      3
      3
      7
      5

      It's not a rhyming form, but no one says ya can't

      Thanks for stopping by!
      blessings, Sandi

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