like spores they explore
looking for space to secure
like saprophytes they ruin the place
like ants they man the space
and neglect repercussions till it surface
we are the labourforce of their populace
who becomes ours?
we are but enzymes
we have no life,
we live for something,
no! nothing,
we are the building blocks of life,
yet! without life.
What did you think
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This is a great poem - I really like the way that you have expressed your emotion in this way
my favourite part was the rhythm of the lines, especially the first one I think from a constructive criticism point you might like to look at the second half the poem in regard to the flow of the lines, and also the part "it surface" doesn't make sense, maybe "surfaces"? - but that is just my opinion and I really did enjoy this poem!
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Polly
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i plan to revise this poem
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