Uninspired thoughts
Tumble through kaleidoscope of mind
Searching for refreshment
Tired manequines
Put on new clothes
Hoping to remake themselves
And I...
Well, I just wait for inspiration
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Angelflower.
700 points, ended March 10, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Comments Contest by Bean Sidhe.
700 points, ended March 18, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best of the Best by Desdmona.
1400 points, ended April 1, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites; short poems only. by deadcolor dreams.
900 points, ended April 6, 44 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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congrats on all the trophies. It is a very well deserved in this case. I like the way you wrote this one... thinking that clothes can make a new person when in truth that is only a change on the outside... I like the ending where you speak of the muse... heck I just like the whole thing. Good write
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Thanks. This was just one of those serindipitous things that came together in almost no time, seemingly all by itself. Actually, my comp glitched when I was submitting it originally, and I thought it was lost. I was so pissed. But it went through, and I got the gold in that contest!
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This is great. I love it, the words and images you used really painted a good picture in my mind. Great job and good luck to you.
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A well expressed poem
I like how you penned this
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Okay, this is good. I like the idea of inspiration and I like the imagery with the manequines but I don't see how it fits into the poem. Although the "kaleidoscope of mind" is fantasic. Good job and good luck! ~Des
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Having spent the past week battling with my self doubts and perceived inability to write, your poem brought a smile and a chuckle. Yeah, I even tried
"Tired manequines
Put on new clothes
Hoping to remake themselves"
but still only managed a slightly higher degree of mediocrity. Well done and congratulations. -
Simplicity and beauty are often not found together because it seems we need to spin great numbers of words to achieve our point. This poem goes against that thought process in spades.
A well earned gold trophy and certainly one of my favorites for this contest. Lovely.
The absolute only critique I could offer you (and it is minor) is that the spelling of mannequins is off. But, as I have found, this website features artists from all parts of the world and so, your spelling may be the accepted one in your part! So...I can't judge too harshly on that.
Otherwise, this is a beautiful piece of work. Thank you for your entry - I enjoyed reading your work very much. Good luck in the contest!
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Alas! Man thats a good poem, like angelflower said theres just something to it, its bloody awesome!
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I love this! it's simple and yet like.. i don't know..lol. I just really liked this.. thank you very much for your entry, best of luck in the contest!
Angel
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Thanks! And thanks for the gold! My computer glitched while I was submitting this, so I honestly thought it was lost. I'm glad it wasn't!
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