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wrecking ball

when we make love the force of you feels like
a wrecking ball shattering me cracking ribs
they splinter and everything about me tears you
taste blood but i can feel it all my walls crumble
everything goes black but i don't know if it's
the moment or if it's my unwillingness to be a part
of it and my desire not to hear him berate me for it.

Author notes

Beh. It's not good.

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Comments

  • DemonBoy
    March 3

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    I thought it was good. I was particularly impressed with its organized but, in a way, run-on styling. Shibby


  • blueyez
    March 2
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    it's short compared to your norm but still good.


  • Candy Morphine
    March 2

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    but i don't know if it's
    the moment or if it's my unwillingness to be a part
    of it and my desire not to hear him berate me for it.
    -Ooh, i love this bit. This is good!