Who am I?
What is this place?
A once beautiful mirror
reflects a broken, chipped face.
Mysterious, fierce eyes
glaze over a world sadly unkept.
How can you express yourself,
when there's simply nothing left.
Take me home,
where the trees are wise and green.
Take me home,
where the children laugh and scream.
Take me home,
so that we could be together -
you could be my dove,
and I'd be your feathers.
Ashes all around me,
Phoenix, take me with you!
I want to be the person,
instead of just the shoe.
As numbness eats away at you,
you feel hopelessly alone.
So put my hand in yours,
and please just take me home.
Take me home,
sanctuary in the street.
Take me home,
to my "place upon the heath".
Take me home,
to that feeling that I know.
You could be my "X",
and I'd be your "O".
Author notes
This is a song/poem I wrote...my first in fact! Some of it comes from personal experience, some is written with other people in mind. It's basically for people who hope for something better, have a special someone in mind and/or feel alone. Enjoy!
A contest entry
- Emotion by Sharitti.
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Excellent write
very cute!
im gonna be honest, i hate reading long poems, but all you poems so far, although long, keeps me going and wanting to read more.
I guess thats how you know that your reading good poetry.
Keep up the great work!
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Aww a beautiful write. To have a hope like that is pretty sweet. Good write.
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Take me home,
where the trees are wise and green.
Take me home,
where the children laugh and scream.
Take me home,
so that we could be together -
you could be my dove,
and I'd be your feathers.
This bit, I really loved. It was flawless. Thank you for entering.
Laura -
hey there is a really strong quality to this piece, good meter and great imagry a real emotion rouser. Nice write
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nice job thank you for the entry. The green text makes me see spots so I won't stay on your page long
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This is definately an art piece. Your flow of writting is so beautifully written. Really great job!! Thank you for entering.
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Love It
Overally, this is just an outsatnding poem. I especially enjoy reading poems with no grammer mistakes. Very nice job!
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Really excellent. I love the rythm and together with the rhyme it flows so well.
You used some fantastic metaphor and imagery making this a very very enjoyable read.
Thanks for sharing it!
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This is very good. I really like the first and second stanzas the best the wording was done really well keep up the great job
-deadly -
wow !
amazing write bro !
good work !
good luck !
<3
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This is good. I read lyrics on here that are overdone but this I could really hear with some music. You really had some original ideas too which I feel can be lacking in some lyrics due to the strict melody it needs to sound with.
My favourite part was "Ashes all around me,
Phoenix, take me with you!
I want to be the person,
instead of just the shoe."
It seemed effortless but said so much to me.
Thanks for sharing.
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I'm Feelin it!
Umiversally or Theologically, I've been trying to fimd the home of which you speak...in my dreams, the path is always blocked & the road never opens. Always strangers wondering who I am walking in there dream.
Perhaps when the curtain falls, we will all finally find home.
Powerfull writing.
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this has such a sway to it, i love the words and i can so relate to this right now, very well done hun!!
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This has quite a lyrical quality about it, I really liked it.
Thanks for sharing.
♥ sinnocence -
holy fuck
i love you sam you should be a poet when you grow up
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this is amazing,
reeeli well written my dear friend
you do so well, no joke, words cant express how awsome this is
your an artist
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