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Where are you when you hurt but aren't even sure that's real?

Putting on makeup IS just  a colorful game,
when it allows you to pretend you know
who you are.

Glitter and bright colors speak kilos
of sparkling confidence when you
have to pretend your smile is real.


  Living in the character of what you
wish you were like- gives you all the
freedom to not only act the small lie
  but to then become it.


  As your mind creates puzzles in the
form of imagination and lethal belief
  its easy to close your eyes to the
    fatal deception.


Fire in your eyes mirroring dreams 
you think you have- following instincts
that could very well have become a fake pattern
  life is simple, and breathless when everyone
  believes the facade you've become
closing your eyes to everything that was once real
means when the barriers fall, when you question
your strength and the act you've lived- its not a
matter of hiding who you really are- its not knowing.





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  • peaceimout
    June 9
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    Your words do speak truth, it does become easier to live behind the mask of a lie than to face the reality of who we really are at times. So often we do lose ourselves and it's a fight to lay the mask down and embrace the heart within. Very well said, thank you for entering and best of luck


  • shiratikva
    April 9

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    Nice poem
    My favorite lines are:
    "Glitter and bright colors speak kilos
    of sparkling confidence when you
    have to pretend your smile is real".

    This is great metaphor here:
    "mind creates puzzles in the
    form of imagination"
    Well done


  • Cyanide Dreams
    April 7

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    Oh my, you sure have entered alot of contests with this piece. I really enjoyed the emotion in this piece. The piece is so true. It has amazing imagery and great use of poetic devices. Great job on this and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • Nam
    April 7
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    "Putting on makeup IS just a colorful game," -- the capping of "IS" isn't necessary, also you have an extra space between "just" and "a".

    "its easy to close your eyes to the" -- "its" would be "it's".

    "matter of hiding who you really are- its not knowing." -- "its" would be "it's".

    Other than those things, a nice poem here.

    -Nam


  • Kathraina silver member
    March 26

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    Wonderful job on this piece, hits reality like a hammer on a nail head.
    Great imagery and emotion conveyed here too.
    Bravo!!!

    ♥ Kate

  • fairypebble
    March 26
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    awesom


  • Draig aine gold member
    March 23
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    well done

    a situation that many of us can identify with good luck i the contest


  • islekine gold member
    March 18
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    Very well penned...

    I really like your sentiments...

  • islekine gold member
    March 18
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    Thanks for entering!

    Best wishes in the contest...and always! Write on!


  • Nostalgic Moon
    March 17
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    I love this, and I can relate. wonderful write


  • August Starlight silver member
    March 16

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    I love the entirety of the last stanza.
    This is a gorgeous write with a lot of powerful imagery. Good luck and thanks for entering!


  • Poetess12
    March 8
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    Your poem gives me something to think about. It is well written.

    Thank you for your entry


  • Riftkin gold member
    March 7

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    Thank you for your wonderful take on the prompt.
    I enjoyed reading your poem here.

    Best of luck to you in my contest.

    Riftkin


  • Night Terrors
    March 7

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    A good poem needs a better title. Sometimes you don't really make a whole lot of sence. Try reading this out loud to yourself. I find that helps. I like that you are writing about what everyone goes through at some point in their life. A lack of self confidence, and the need to be part of the bigger picture. You can never fit in though if you act like everyone else. Not to mention you'll only wind up losing little peices of yourself. I am glad you entered this. My favorite part was:

    As your mind creates puzzles in the
    form of imagination and lethal belief
    its easy to close your eyes to the
    fatal deception


  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    March 6

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    i very very very much agree. this is very well done, and extremely well written. well thought out, as well. you have a grace for metaphors. thank you for entering my contest


  • serenity silvermoon
    March 5

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    love it great job what a wonderful poem thanks 4 sharing good luck to you in this contest

    by: serenity silvermoon


  • poet360
    March 3

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    Very well penned! Not only is it well written, but you did a very good job of conveying concepts which not many people your age can convey. Great write and good luck in the contest!


  • hawkeslake gold member
    March 2

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    Excellent flow of thought here, explaining behaviors that sometimes seem to be self-defeating. I think you sum it up well, that after one "acts" a certain way for so long, it is not a matter of hiding who you really are, it is truly that you no longer know who you are. Very well done.

  • verses on flesh
    March 1

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    I thought this was really great insight for someone your age. The concept of losing yourself in the masks that you wear day in and day out. Either to belong or to protect, or simply to forget. I think most people have done this at some point in their lives or will.

    A point very well expressed. Thank you for sharing your work here.

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