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Rendered

How perfectly my fingers curl

around your smooth shaft,

as I dip you into portrait pink

 

and spread you across my canvas

painting the blush of excitement

on every part of my body.

 

When our masterpiece is complete

I will be satiated, saturated

in pearlescent hues of contentment.

 

 

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Thanks to Pure Thought for his help in getting this one right. Inspired by JW Waterhouse's exquisite work.

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  • Sesheta
    May 26

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    Painting and lovemaking--sounds like synonyms to me. Love the different facets of these words. They're beautiful no matter how you look at them. "Satiated, saturated"--great words, great sound, like a song in my head. And pearlescent! Mama Mia! J'adore.


  • log-home-guy-Nic
    April 12
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    wow!

    very hot lovely imagry. thanks nic


  • PerVirtuous
    March 12

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    When you shake spear you really Shakespeare.

    Uh-huh.

    Satiated, saturated,
    and if I read right conjugated.
    As you now bask in sweet repleat
    I best move on (to be discreet).


  • Happy3
    March 8

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    How perfectly my fingers curl
    around your smooth shaft
    as I dip you into portrait pink

    You're voluptuous. Aren't you?

    It's a masterpiece


    • Auburn Sunrise gold member
      March 8
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      Voluptuous? You mean literally voluptuous?

      No, not really. I'm actually very thin and dainty.

      Thanks, glad you enjoyed.


      • Happy3
        March 8
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        Oh...how I love the thin and dainty...easy to grab...easy to handle....lol

  • mz.butter
    March 6
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    very good imagery,liked it alot.


  • Flowergirl
    March 6

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    very nice i love it keep up the great work i wish i could still play in paint with my hands those were the days keep up the great work....


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    March 5
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    Incredibly hot metaphor. Absolutely breathtaking choice of words here. beautiful, well done


  • Rainbow7
    March 2

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    Painting the blush of excitement
    on every part of my body.

    Aren't these the marvelous lines?
    You're fantastic, pretty girl!


  • Rainbow7
    March 2
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    Painting the blush of excitement
    on every part of my bod


  • HereComesTheSun
    March 2

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    yay work by auburn sunrise! i love reading your work becuase its so beautiful and really draws me the reader in with your word choice which is unique and your rhythm which always reads so smooth. awesome work


  • Metaphorist
    March 2

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    Only you can write something as erotic as this without crossing the line into vulgarity and manage to maintain the metaphor throughout the poem as well. Love it! Wish I thought of the idea first

  • Bruce silver member
    March 2
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    Wow - great collaboration. Seamlessly written - sensual and smooth. Well done!


  • CaliOkie silver member
    March 2

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    Sensual and beautiful . . . this one just screams satisfaction. Sorry, couldn't help myself.

    I love the painting metaphor. Someone once said that any creation of any kind was an act of sex. I guess I'm still trying to create.

    This is excellent.

    Way to go.

    Garrison


    • Auburn Sunrise gold member
      March 2
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      I agree that art is a very sexual thing most of the time. Or at least passionate.

      Thank you


  • usefuldistraction
    March 2

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    Brilliant title...the aura of sensuality is so captivating in the first stanza, that when the breaks get pushed as you transition to painting, there is no whiplash, just that aha, moment of oh this is sooooo good! Great writing. Nice use of imagery rich sensual "code" words and phrases, like, smooth shaft, dip you, spread you, blush of excitemnet, every part of my body, satiated, saturated hues of contentment. WOW! So wonderfully woven together. I wanna see this painting that cause such a stir!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    March 2

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    Allie! This is brilliant!

    Love,
    mj.


  • notorious
    March 2
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    Don't have to have had sex to recognize this as being sexy.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    March 2
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    I see you are still in artist mode. Nice soft hues in this.
    Joe


  • thejollytinker
    March 1
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    I really think you should not toy with daddy!! What a nice expression.


  • cubert
    March 1

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    wow lol. the word "shaft" just jumps out at you from this otherwise soft piece! but when I reconcile it with the metaphor for the handle of a paintbrush (what is the proper word for that...I am drawing a blank...), the cleverness of it produces a grin. lovely imagery! I don't know which bits were buddy's, but kudos to you both!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    March 1
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    I'd comment and say this was great but people might think I was conceited


    • Daizee silver member
      March 2
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      I'll comment then.. it was great Clappy things for both of you

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