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who am i?

 

I see silence on your face, 

a haunting that shows memories

were lost on roads of elsewhere.

 

Today, when tears of happiness

should spill forth, there was nothing

but an echo of silence.

 

A life, misplaced and ignored,

by the trials of time.

 

 

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prompt: forgotten

AP Name: L o w e r c a s e P r e l u d e

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  • Broken Vow
    March 5, 2009

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    i don't know what to say. such sadness in this piece. your words are penned as if you really know what you are talking about. whether it is from experience or from knowing and seeing others, it is truly fantastic.
    great job!


  • Silent Emotions
    March 4, 2009

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    Though it has already been said twice, I'll say it anyways, great take on the prompt. =)

    I really did get that sense of being forgotten from this and it's only 7 lines. You have an amazing talent.


  • new born
    March 3, 2009

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    Great take on the prompt, this is really lonely and lovely. Candy Morphine describes it really well: empty.
    Great job and good luck in the contest!


  • Candy Morphine
    March 3, 2009

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    Today, when tears of happiness
    should spill forth, there was nothing
    but an echo of silence.
    -very much the feeling of lonliness. Empty.

    What a great take on the prompt. Goodluckk.