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Truth Untold like a Love Unlived

Help me discontinue the building
of this wall I am creating.
Tell me how you really fell,
stop all this mindless debating.

I'm not strong enough
to tear down these iron like walls again.
I'll need someone's help this time
and I'm hoping it will be you,
my loveless boyfriend.


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  • Denerica
    March 2

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    Well expressed emotion and choice of words, a typo dear, in the 3rd line fell-feel. Well written. Blessings.