From their birth-
her whole world
had been her boys-
Fighting for them-
through out their
younger years-
loving them with
each passing day-
Never had she known-
just how hard
it was gonna be-
day by day
they grew-
one by one
she had to let
them fly-
the day she dreaded
the most-
the last one
gave her a hug
and with an
"I love you mom"
flew- to begin
his life on his own-
She felt lost-
didn't know what to do-
how to feel,
how to react,
now she would not
know of the day to day
with her boys,
not a one of them-
she had raised them
for this day-
and knew they
could do it-
But she was not
prepared
for the pain
she felt-
like her whole
world had just
crashed in around her-
how would she handle
the day to day
without her boys-
she knew her days
were now hers-
she would be able
to spend them her way-
but -
was she ready?
Author notes
Well as this says, Justin finally flew the nest, and I feel lost
Please tell me what you think
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needs workin on!!!!
Sorry to be mean, Your poem needs work....I love the emotions but express them in a way that some phrase rhyme...Because in poems words are suppose to basically sometimes rhyme so work on your rhyming skill, otherwise good write -
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G'day
hmmmm sorry to burst your bubble but poems don't have to rhyme at all, look at haiku, free write, or image based poetry. There is far more to poetry then simple rhyme. Oh and to you Nyetta, a very expressive write. I can't relate as I do not have children but I can imagine how tough it must be. -
I am sorry you feel that way. This comes from the heart, the day my son moved out.
I have never comformed to what everyone else thinks I should, nor do I plan to start now. I would not be where I am today, if I did. I have been writing this way for over 20 years, and will not change.
This is what you call free verse. That is what I do most of.
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These are emotions par excellence and these come straight from the heart if not the gut.The hand that rocks the cradle rules the world but then the strings that bind the mother and her offspring are tighter than the umbilical cord that gets severed
Paragraphs are well choreographed and lend to me the feeling on display and create the ethos surrounding this muse...God Bless You for this wonderful write Shubs
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Beautiful! I don’t have kids but from reading this poem and others you have written like it I can now see what motherhood is like. I think you have helped me tremendously because I can be prepared for it. I couldn't help to think that along with the sadness of your kids leaving the nest you can look forward to being a grandma.
Love,
Amera♥
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huggies .............
dearest sissie how long it has been since i spoke with you, i send you a thousand hugs of comfort to help you thru this time, when my son moved out my world fell in on me but time has shown me that it is the best for him and he is growing and maturing into the man i knew he could be.....
be well.....
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awwww
i had to go hug my kids after this one....my first kid will leave for college in 3 years....i dont know how i will handle that, but this is truly an emotional and beautiful write!
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My first one left like seven years ago, then then next one was like three years ago, and well my baby, (pic below this) Fogotten Legacy, just moved out... and it hit me pretty hard I already miss him...
Thanks, and don't ever pass up the chance to hug them and tell them you love them and are proud of them!
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Mom, this brought tears to my eyes. *hugs you tight* I will of course check in every few days. I mean come on, I'm a momma's boy at heart. lol. All I have to say is five words Dorothy said when she flew over the rainbow. "There's no place like home." I love you Mom.
-Justin
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Thank you baby. It was hard on me.. You are my baby, and well it hit me hard. I miss not having you here all the time... you were the last to go, you know. and yes I miss your brothers too, but somehow with you being the last one to fly the nest, really hit me hard.
I love you too baby.
and love
Mom
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Your children may grow up and they may grow older but they will always be yours no matter what
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Powerful
Oh my sis, one can feel the mother's love flowing from your words. Such a hard part of being a parent. Thank you for sharing this wonderful, heartfelt write.
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It is indeed hard to let go. You have expressed it well and heartfelt my friend. Bless you..
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This reminds me of how my Mum must have felt when my Brother and I left the nest!
She married and was divorced young as many people do now and did back in the 50's as my Dad was an alcoholic who used to try to beat us when he came home from the bar many years ago. She raised us - working 2 jobs - all by herself for the most part and this was a little bit heartbreaking to read. I'm sure that Justin will come back to see his MUM whenever he needs a to feel a ray of sunshine in his heart and soul which I am sure he will be doing often. He may have left the nest BUT from what I know of him HIS MUM is his first love and will always hold a special place in his heart and soul. Now that he is gone WHY NOT get it on with JIMBOB who needs to keep just as warm from all of the snow that you've been having - more than you've had in over 100 years from what I hear.
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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huggles my dear Sis and know our dear Justin and the others will and are watched and guided closely - embraced by warmth of gossamer wings and compassionate spirits that your faith hope and guidance has carried them through all their years - yes he may be starting a new milestone in his life but you shall always reign within his heart near or far. stay strong much love and many blessings always xxxx
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