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Why you?

I just want to rage
To scream and shout
To feel pain

If not anything else
I need a release
A major eruption

You flooded my sense
Speared my numbness
And killed my loneliness

A single kiss
A simple temptation
You destroyed my self control

Something i yearn for
Tempt for
Desire

But which i can't have

Why did you have to happen to me?
Why tonight?
Why that kiss?
Why you?

What do you think? first write in a long time.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • ReachingSerenity
    March 4

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    It is lovely to see you writing poems again, despite that they dont seem any happier..it is really good stuff though! well done
    you know where i am is you ever need to talk!

  • Screaming Chimera
    March 2
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    Thanks hun ^.^
    nice to see me writting again huh?
    x


  • Bride Of Hate
    March 2
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    Good work

  • Screaming Chimera
    March 1
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    Still lonley, still numb.
    nothing worse then being tempted and drawn in by what you cant have. the happiness hopefully i hit, but wont happen at this time. more like numbness and inward focused rage.

    but thank you for your comment and im so pleased you liked it.

  • FallingRainDrop
    March 1

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    this is amazing. i can really relate. sometimes we are so comfortable with how we feel that when we feel something new it freaks us out, but its not always a bad thing. its a good thing if your not lonely. everyone deserves to be happy. amazing poem :]

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