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you always catch me without lying.



Breaths of air
hazing the windows of my rationality
& derailing trains of thought,
your clever abilities are practically

mind numbing.


It's troubling me-
not being able to see
through your obvious ruse.





but you're just so


convincing.





Author notes

20-60words
Prompt:

word- disguise


Eh I kinda half-you-know-whatted it xD lol
Hope you like it anyway ^_^
I may revise. Depending on how much I hate it. Ahaha

Props to Forever The Sickest Kids for the random title ^_^;

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Comments

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  • Umi Juvariel
    March 25

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    The last line brought this home, and that made it wonderful. I enjoyed this write. I felt a connection, like I was the character. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    March 18

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    I love this. Nicely done! Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! I'm honored to have you show your work here!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 16

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    Ooh.. loveddd this!! Amazing even in such
    brevity. Beautifully done!

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • Reanna Eryn
    March 16
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    Amazing and beautiful.


  • written-in-ink
    March 1
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    gah this is amzing


  • luna-midnight gold member
    March 1

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    i love this, hehehe. and i love forever the sickest kids and i love the song you snathed it from, haha. this is wicked! thanks for entering, and good luck
    Stephanie ♥

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