Colorless thoughts
render torn beats
of promises;
lingering the silence
with grounded sensibility
blotting echoes
into syllables of black
vacuity remains,
as contempt breeds
a jaded soul
for feathers of a flock
I have become~
Author notes
Prompt: pulp
Part of Speech: adjective
Definition: cheap, vulgar, especially regarding reading material
In a list
A contest entry
- Pulp by MuddyKing.
1000 points, ended March 31, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Though I understand the use of placing yourself into it at the end, I feel (after reading it twice) that omitting the "I" would work better than having it in. Just a thought.
Other than that, a good piece.
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lingering the silence, and becoming part of the flock ..such wonderful images sending forth the mood within this poem. Pulp is a mixture of all put into one, disguising each piece as the same. I like how you have used the prompt. Good poem.
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"blotting echoes
into syllables of black"
"for feathers of a flock
I have become~" <--loved both stanzas...they really stood out to me while reading...
I love this piece!
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The last two lines tore me up-scuse the pun-
I am not a master of free verse at all and I can see why with poets like yourself creating something like this- in just a few lines you manage to convey everything so well-
Hilly xxx
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Torn ...
... like pages, mixed, disheveled
order is lost or stolen
bittered, shadowed, punished
with no fault
no cause to be so illy used
your words burn with an inner fire
when you will...
let it be instead
a light
for any
honorable
moth to see
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well done. The mind becomes what we read, good, bad or ugly.hahahaha, i used to read them, and other such "stuff:, but found better use of my life and time. I love to read, just more choosy. lol. Thoughtful, deep, penetrating to the soul. Keep penning.
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this voice sounds familiar, yet in a way it doesn't
either way you will be a favorite
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Oh thank you so very much for the honorable mention.. such a wonderful and challenging contest to participate in.. I am so very honored!
Thank you
Jazzy
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I love what you've done with the prompt...this is a darker write than what I'm used to from you, but it's powerful and full of emotion. Well done
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some very powerful images and senses flow out of this wonderful write. it speaks with intensity and passion despite a perceived lack of interest in what the narrator had previously read. well done my dear cuz
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Amazing write, bff!
I love where you took the prompt...
As always , excellent write!
Lynda
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