It feels so long ago
Like another century
Since our very first hello
Was etched into my memory
Now we've drifted so far away
To opposing ends of the universe
But still I always say your name
Like the lyrics to a favorite verse
So I lie awake at night
And dream the days away
Hoping the next time I see you
Maybe you'll look my way
I wonder if you still remember
All the times I made you smile
And reminisce the thoughts awhile
Or cast them away to exile
Did you ever feel alone
Anytime I wasn't there
Do you ever miss me now
Or don't you even care
Do you think I think of you
And would it anger you to know
That i've always truely loved you
And I long to tell you so
Is there any way somehow
That I could prove to you again
And let you know how much it meant
When you called me best friend
And would you strike me down
If I dared to stand my ground
To beg you to please to forgive me
And waited til your answer's found
And from your cloud above
Would you look down upon me
And extend your hand to save me
Drowning in this firey sea
Author notes
Blah!
I fuck everything up eventually....
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this is good. reminds me of how i fcked up. u dont fck up everything eventually, ur still a good poet and always will b unless u mess up on purpose.
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excellent piece flows like a song easy to read and nod along to, forget the girl focus on doing a performance get you right first then you will find love comes in abundace, its the natural flow just like this poem come on boy chin up
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What good is the love someone gives you based on your status compared to the love someone gives you because how how you make them feel, just you yourself as a person, not what the rest of the world sees you for.
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This is so incredible. Most people can't pull off successful rhyme the way you do. It just makes the entire poem flow so beautifully overall, though there are a couple places where it gets a little choppy.
We all endure hardships in life, some more than others, we can't expect things to come without failure. Beautiful job.
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Rhyming is usually the only part of the process tha makes it fun to write, elsewise I would just leave the buried thoughts sticking partially sticking out of their shallow graves.
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My pleasure.
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Whiney hey? Whine: complain in an unreasonable, repeated, or irritated way.
None of these apply to me as the reader.. it's not a whine.. but a skilled out pouring of emotion.
Great rhyme as always.
Another amazing write.
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It is whiney to the one who must hear it repetively for all a mortal eternity.
I guess it's just one of those horrible things one has to experience first hand to truely be misfortunate to truely understand.
Thanks for the read and comment and appluse though
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I must say this is absolutly beautiful! I love your style it is one of the best I have seen in damn near forever.
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this is really beautiful .Somehow u continue thinking that no one will ever like u .This makes me sad ,cause I already like u I know u don't wanna hear that either
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I have a great cyber-facade of coolness that makes everyone think im like some grand palace with a courtyard of gold brick and a fountain full of bubbley orange soda and blah blah blah ...
But yeah, im not so great, really.
I just put up a good front and make a good liar online, even when I don't want to be
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not whiney... i think we all wished someone would feel this way about us. Someone is lucky.
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My favorite poem of yours so far!!!
I can relate to every stanza!
But for pete's sake change the title
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Title stands, because it is proper.
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I just think this is too good a poem to have that kind of title ... it's like you're not valueing your feelings and writing ... but maybe I got it wrong
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