The proper words elude me. It was lust
But more than lust - a nightmare and a dream.
The proof of my religion turned to dust
Yet haunted me until I moved to scream
But I was silenced by his forceful hand
Across my lips. I stirred beneath his grip.
My back against his chest, he left his brand
Upon my neck while clawing at my hip.
He twisted me to look into his eyes.
His pupils like a cat's, he studied me.
He might have uttered sixty thousand lies.
I'd not have heard or cared, he'd conquered me.
A moth into the flame - into the fire.
I hated him yet he was my desire.
I hated him yet he was my desire -
His kinky hair as bold and dark as death,
The falcon's nose, a riled badger's ire,
His pacing and his restless wolf-like breath
That echoed in his chambers every night.
A serpent's tongue, a stallion's awing skin.
Too much to still be sure of what was right.
Enough to make me rationalize sin.
Again my words fall short. No similie
Nor adjectives, or nouns, or metaphor
Could ever rival such an entity,
Could ever hold the esscence I adore
That is for all six senses like a feast
Despite how he corrupts. I love the beast.
Despite how he corrupts, I love the beast.
I find myself unable to resist
And too ashamed or scared to seek a priest.
Perhaps, deep down, I want it to persist
And yet I know my actions weren't my own
To an extent! I could have fought him more
Or could I? I was confident alone.
Too confident. Too weak to close that door...
I danced with Chaos, trapped, but happily;
His violent passion left me so fufilled
And yet so hollow. Love is misery...
And thus it was that fateful bullet killed
The body he possessed. It turned to dust
But now he lives in me and I am lust!
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Unusual Love Poems- For All Age Groups by Mercury Rising.
800 points, ended May 23, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It’s a CREEPY Dark Rounds Contest by Paloszoo by Paloszoo.
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Comments
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Your word choice is amazing. This is really outstanding! I enjoyed the read! Thanks for entering my rounds contest and for showing your work here. It's a pleasure reading it!
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Wow! out of the box
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Excellently penned. This lead me to want another verse, which is good. congrats on the gold.
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My goodness, this is a really powerful and passionate poem of dangerous obsession and dark possession by a kind of composite magnetic animal incarnate, that suggests so many interpretations, since you have skillfully avoided spelling out the name of the beast, but have certainly evoked the nature of your dark and forbidden love interest, which seems to both repulse and attract. Not to mention, your terrific triple sonnet form, impeccable rhyme and meter, and a whole host of poetic sound effects. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering this great poem.
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very deep with good imagery.
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This is a tight and quite intense dark write that holds the reader all the way through to the twist in the end. The rhyme flows well, not forced. Very nicely crafted, write on!
Dennis
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Very riviting poem, that holds you until the eand. A great inspiration for the Bandit who chose it!
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I was asked to view this poem and am glad I was. This is an exceptional poem and you show unbelievable promise. I don't know if you are looking for a critical review or not. If you are, message me and I will PM you one. There are some areas that could be improved, most notably punctuation. It is, however, one of the better poems I have read in a while.
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Amazing! I could hardly pull away... this is truly a dark, passionate piece; so vivid. I felt it deeply. The repeated lines especially caught me. Excellent!
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Wow... so dark, yet passionate. I love the imagery and especially the lust you express. Very good write! I now feel the need to paruse some more of your writings!
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Holy Cow,,,this was amazing in metaphors, imagery, flow and content. Super impressive and wonderful ending to finalize it. Superb work,,,a great read.
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WOW! I absolutely love this poem! I can relate big time! All I need to say is that you have expressed so much and I have to say that this poem is one of the best that I have ever read and that I could relate more than any others, of course that is besides ones that I wrote about myself. I give you manty kados!!!
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I was looking for some of your work to read and found you spotlighted! The end of sonnet 2 and the beginning line of sonnet three: how wonderful the subtle shift you made! What extraordinary work you do, dragon lady! If I was to revise this piece I'd ruin it.
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such mastery
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Many thanks.
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Thank you!
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this is an amazing poem, great work!
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Oh yes, I know of this possession, sad so sad but true... even though all of us see the devil in many ways, forms, addictions, depression, but this write shows all of these ~ Outstanding writing I have been to so many of these lines like dancing with chaos, and oh the best one too weak to close the door. I must say this is a dark one for you but one of the best I've read and not to mention the form, the flow, I found this in the front page spotlight just thought you would like to know....
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Thank you so much. I didn't know I had been spotlighted.
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is the disclaimer for 'copyscape' something new for allpoetry? I've never seen it before...Nice idea...
Beautiful poetry, btw...
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Thanks. No, the copyscape is just something I started doing because someone stole two of my poems before.
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WOW!
Way deep, could not stop reading, dream fantasy maybe, but what imagination. You spell'd me man. Well written, thanks for sharing. It held me fast emotionally.
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Here I am again! Your later poem led me to read this splendidly crafted triple sonnet which seems to precede the mood of the other. Are you having a bad amorous experience or have you been reading bad bedtime stories?
Whatever, I'm full of admiration for this fine piece of work.
Congratulations and applause.
It's past my bedtime now, but I shall return in the near future.
PS: "A serpent's tongue, a stallion's awing skin."
What does "awing" mean, please?
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Oh, a tour de force! This is certainly one of your best, everything works brilliantly and the cadence is masterful... a brilliant piece of writing, but then, we expect nothing less from you!
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Absolutely captivating! This poem starts out strong and continues strong throughout the entire masterpiece. This piece truly raises the bar in the art of the dark genre. I think it’s brilliant how each sonnet increases the intensity of the read yet each one can be read as a standalone piece. Another notable wonder of this poem is the repetition of the last line of each couplet in the first line of the next sonnet like a crown of sonnets and I think that is a brilliant poetic device. Bravo! (Throws flowers at your feet
Love,
Amera♥
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A mini-crown (a coronet) of sonnets although I guess for that description your last and first lines should be shared not merely their rhyme but that is just playing with words. Delightfully worked sonnet chain. Great meter and rhyme throughout and the message well delivered.
JaP
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very well penned! i think that the rhyming sounds just slightly forced in certain parts of the poem, but other than that.....this is really good!! after reading it i feel depressed and a bit amused.
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Would you mind pointing out where you feel it sounds "forced?" Thanks.
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Very well written and very well constructed. The balance and flow of your poem is just superb. Great write.
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A well crafted write seething with wonderful emotions and stark imagery gr8 one poet
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Powerfull piece all through.
The conflict is real, and immediate, the whole poem has a sense of urgency that is quite captivating.
I especialy like how it ends, and love IS misery.
Brilliant.
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