I see this angel staring back at me
and what I wouldn't do
If only I knew what she does see
with her beautiful shades of green and blue.
I ask do I deserve
this angel be sent from above
A beauty not of this earth
to share a forever love.
Each time she looks my way
there's this feeling in the air
Knowing she always knows what to say
so I know she'd always be here.
I've done so many wrong
but loved so many right
Finally I find we sing the same song
and someone who's worth my fight.
I no longer fear
or doubt my destiny
I see her laying there
this angel staring back at me.
Author notes
Option 2: http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e357/rickie83/Rickie/16DEC20032.jpg
A contest entry
- Prompt of Rickie by Broken-Rickie.
1050 points, ended March 18, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Something beautiful by Brlsbb.
700 points, ended March 10, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Heaven by Heavenly Angel.
700 points, ended March 27, 76 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please don't critique this.
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So very truly beautiful..sigh...
I'm rather fond of angels
I loved this piece; it's a true beauty
Thank you for sharing this! All the best to you!
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some very great imagrey is used here and i thank you for your entree "If only I knew what she does see
with her beautiful shades of green and blue."
this was my fav line. Thank you for you entree, i did enjoy it.
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Beautiful I realy like this
It is verry heart warming
And LOVING
Keep writing
i will keep reading
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OMG beautiful!!!!, i love this poem
once among your best!!!
keep it up my #1 poet
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Wowzers! Another great write! You have a real knack, man! My favorite stanzas were these two!
Each time she looks my way
there's this feeling in the air
Knowing she always knows what to say
so I know she'd always be here.
I've done so many wrong
but loved so many right
Finally I find we sing the same song
and someone who's worth my fight.
Awesome job and keep it up! -
Definatly a poem speaking of a uncertain love which you are great at doing, good poem here speaking of powerful emotions. good luck in the contest.
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it was really good
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pretty.
good luck in the contest.
kAsSiE
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Ah, angels, they are so much a part of our lives, sometimes so much so that we take them for granted, but you have honored yours in this piece lots of love
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I love how subtle and yet how still beautiful it is. Sometimes, love poems are over-worded and cliche. This one definitely isn't.
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Wonderful
Very well done. A terrific write for the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
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Beautiful, heartfelt. Expressed with delightful and touching words.
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Beautifully written. Shows a lot of emotion and whomever you wrote it for is one very lucky woman. I enjoyed this write very much. Keep writting it is beautiful.
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aww very beautiful... indeed it has an angelic touch...
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Another lovely write from you thank you for sharing this with me best to you in the contest be well.
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simply beautiful Joel.
Thanks for sharing with me
Good luck in the contest
Passions
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That was a very beautiful write. I realy liked and very much enjoyed reading this poem. You did very well on this, It reminds me of my fiance. Again, a nice write, keep the pen flowing, and I truely hope that all is well
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Amazing write, I love this poem it is so sweet. My favorite part is "I ask do I deserve
this angel be sent from above
A beauty not of this earth
to share a forever love."
Great write, keep it up! -
Im not sure what to say besides this is an amazing poem, I love the imagry and everything.....great job!!!
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This... This left me speechless. This is one of the most beautiful things I have ever read. This is a love I could only dream about... The imagery you captivated, the emotion, was beautiful. This is a beautifully written piece, Thankyou so much for sharing it!
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aw a very beautiful poem I love your imagery and depth throughout its beautiful good luck in the contestmaralisa
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Lost for words to be honest. I didn't think someone would take this picture and take it to the level you did. I really don't know what to say about this. I can tell you it doesn't suck and it's really good. I hope that makes sense, if not, I can try to explain it more. Thanks for entering and good luck...
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