Let your eyes claim to the west
Let your faith reign supreme.
The time is coming soon where there will be no more time
This is my burden, that you only know the truth I know
Remember your actions speak louder
Than every single word you scream
Reach for the sky
You don't have to die
I promise you can live
I promise you'll live
Reach to the ground
Or fall silent to the sound
I promise you can live
I promise you'll live
Take my words with a grain of salt
You'll never find freedom, find hope
In this world
You'll never find freedom, find hope
In this world
The king is coming to reclaim.
Splitting the eastern skies
While the world keeps
Hiding under their shame.
You better lay your sins to rest
You better say your prayers
Tonight could be your last night
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EXQUISITE
I loved this piece you did a great job on this piece,
A wonderful message here. My hat is off to you my friend. peace be with you
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left me breathless
i love this....this is totally amazing! it literally took my breath away! good job! -
Reach for the sky
You don't have to die
I promise you can live
I promise you'll live
Reach to the ground
Or fall silent to the sound
I promise you can live
I promise you'll live
I think this would be more demanding if you actually made it "you will". Contractions are good but tend to take away from the fierce desire behind the words. You have a talent that isn't seen often these days. Amazing.
Much love,
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i really like it. keep writing!! all ur poems are good. this one is very inspirationalish to me. i like how it doesnt end on a happy note...cuz life in general doesn't always have happy endings
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This poem reminded me of 1 Thessalonians 5:2...
"For you know quite well that the day of the Lord will come unexpectedly, like a thief in the night." (NLT)
I was reminded of how self-centered I am compared to Him. So truthful is this write
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Every human being on this planet is self-centered compared to Him :]
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ok
I am a believer and as such I worry not of a last night. For I believe at that moment it will be a bright and uncloudy day. (to quote a verse from a gospil song) and memories of the past fadded away.
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You got the right idea! :]
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Not quite yin and yang but I do take these words with a grain of salt. I feel this poem underlines that we could die at any moment, yet we have this moment to live. To hold onto hope for the actions you may be able to fulfill but to know that the end will come eventually.
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Of course we know death is inevitable, the only thing we don't know is when and how. So it's easy to proclaim your faith, than leave this world with your sins unforgiven.
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Excellent
Very well written, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well, although I, personally, disagree with the overall christian tone of the poem, since I am not a christian, None the less, again, well done. -
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Yeah, that's okay though. You respect my faith and I'll respect your beliefs :]
Then I can only hope you change your mind, haha. Thanks for the comment :] -
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I can appreciate your comment. There is a line I once read many years ago, in a poem, I think. It is simply this:
"You go to your church (synagogue, mosque, etc), and I'll go to mine, yet let's walk along together". Sorry, I don't remember any title, or arthor. Hope you have a good evening. -
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I really like that line, I'll try googling it up see if a can produce any results :]
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Coools, if you find the source, please let me know, 'cause I first read it way back in the '60's.
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Haha it wasn't hard to find at all. Well that is if this is the right one lol.
http://www.bluegrasslyrics.com/all_song.cfm-recordID=s04282.htm -
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Aye, I think it is. I now remember a few lines were once quoted in the Sunday News Supplement: Parade Magazine. I don't remember the date or issue number, however. Thank you. I'll copy to a personal file a little later.
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Any time! :]
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Sweet. Nice write. Wow...I'm talking to myself...(my name is Brad too...)
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wow.
this is just the basic truth about the bad things going on this world and very soon the king of kings will delete the wicked.the poem reminds me of a biblical quotation.thanks for that good work.
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Thanks for reading and taking the time to write such a nice comment :]
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This has a real musical feel to it...I thought your convictions and talent came through loud and clear...it is an awesome achievement when we can pair them up and let our work speak for us...great job!! peace and light, kp
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Exactly! Actions will always speak louder than any words.
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It honors the King...
This is an honorable write and a worthy testimony. It is only true as these lines attest:
"The king is coming to reclaim.
Splitting the eastern skies
While the world keeps
Hiding under their shame."
Good write here poet.
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It is all for big guns up stairs :]
I only regret not writing more often for him..
Thanks!
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Tis very true poet tis true and it will be an incredible day ...an excellent write dear poet
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Incredible is an understatement! haha
Words will not describe that day :]
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Glorious
I love this piece. It keeps us expecting. Very well written.
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Thanks! :]
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"Reach for the sky
You don't have to die
I promise you can live
I promise you'll live
Reach to the ground
Or fall silent to the sound
I promise you can live
I promise you'll live"
amazing lines
great write.
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Thanks! :]
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What a let down
The last line destroys all hope. I was hoping for some saving grace would give us a long life and happiness
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Why would I want to end it happy note? I'm not telling a happy story. I'm telling everyone to forget the trend and follow Jesus Christ. Forget politics, forget what the T.V. says. Everyone is forgetting what's most important and the bad thing is, it's going unnoticed. If this is a let down to you, maybe you should come out of your shell and pray... hard.
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Great Sermom
Be sure your sins go before you and not follow you - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe --------------------------------------- peace ------------------------ PTL
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You're an awesome dude! :]]
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This is amazing.
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Thanks buddy :]
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