Floor boards,soft breeze,
dog lying at my feet,swinging,reading
craving my Southern
sweet tea mixed
with my front porch.
hiding place given to another.
A contest entry
- 25 words of Craving by HopelessScribbles.
725 points, ended March 2, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Touch me back
Comments
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This is quite lovely and lyrical, and was a delight to read.
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Just fair
The first couple of lines are the best . Most in keeping with the title word . The rest seems more
incomplete . As if there is a lot more to say which
would add substance to this very short piece that
is both a little too long and too short . "Boards , soft breeze , dog lying at my feet ." Add "on my front porch " to that , and you probably need no
more . That is what I mean by too long . The rest ,
is what makes it too short . A little of this , a little
of that . Still , the short part said it all .
Greenwolfe 1962
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you are very right about this.. just so many words were allowed for the contest. I lost this home to the bank a year ago this month. I will replace it.. I had so many memories there it was my country haven. I do not do well writing about it .
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Nothing like a cool Carolina night.....porch swing and sweet tea....loved this read......Novy
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this was relaxing to me, i really love the swing, and the dog, just a lovely scene you made, congrats on the hm, and take care
Stephanie ♥
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You have created an image of the peaceful pleasures of "home".
Great write and best wishes in the contest!
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reminds me of Charlston, relaxing with my wife sipping the sweet tea...home away from home...the sweet life...peace
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Some of the simple pleasures are the most wonderful of all.
Well Done....Best wishes in the contest
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Reminds me of a relaxing summer day. Right now it seems so far away. Wonderful write hun.
Best of luck in the contest.
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Nice!
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the luxury of home is nice to be able to enjoy! nice poem of memories, thank you for this entry...good luck
mm
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25 words!!!!!!!!!!! why did I see 20 I have to stop coloring my hair sigh look for changes.
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Lovely poem. Short and sweet!
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Rheea
Surely heaven on earth.
Nice short form poetry.
Joe
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Great thought here my friend!
I hope that you do well with this one.
Take care and good luck to you here!
Jeremy0826
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