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God of War

The blackest waves consume the light
Eternally,
In the quest for life
I rise towards the fight

As blackened clouds eclipse the sun
You cannot escape the pain
The noose, forever tight
Alone I fight til this day is done

Committing eternal blasphomy
Warring afront the gates of valhalla
The enemy attacks with malice
This is no place for me

Storming through the Nordic fields
I am not a man, but a god
My name is Thor
I am The God of War





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  • mcope8050
    May 26

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    wonderfully done

    very nicely done,,, mystical and intriguing,,, thanks for sharing this one,,, a joy to read,, good luck in the contest


  • Kathraina silver member
    May 15

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    Great job with this piece!
    Marvelous flow and imagery throughout. I love the concept you've used here.
    Bravo

    ♥ kate


  • karma-n-peace
    March 1

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    Applause!
    Awesome flow and rhyme that adds to the interest of the story.

    An awesome video of the mind, the metaphor and imagery is brilliant, making this an enjoyable read, it also has an inspirational feel to it.
    Great write, entertaining!