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Past, Present and Future

Echoing through time and space -
Wistfully meditating upon myselves
As we had been, are and shall be.

Trepidation adulterates elation.

Future reflections - now shattered.
Powerless to meld each vision singly,
Images are clouded and echoes muted.

Author notes

Prompt: Mirrors
Words: 36

The idea behind this is looking into two mirrors facing each other, looking at the "echoes", and thus creating the past - a mirror, the future - a second mirror and the present - the real me between them.

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  • monster.
    August 20, 2009

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    I thought this was really good. I will admit, I am still confused on the first stanza. But I do like your use of good punctuation and showing me a nice poem under forty words! The imagery was nice and I really liked this concept! Good job! I'm going to say yes, because I think you have awesome talent! Congrats, you are a finalist


    • Gigglegasm gold member
      August 20, 2009
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      The first stanza is where the mirrored images come into play. Do you know what it's like to have two mirrors opposing each other with you in the middle? Next time you're in a changing room, have a look. The reflections just go on and on and on. In this piece, I consider one set of reflections to be the past (the numerous stage of 'me' there has been), the other set is the future (various stages yet to come) and myself in the middle is well me, right now in the present.


  • Shari-Lei gold member
    July 1, 2009

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    Thank you for your entry

    I love your word choice. The words just spin into one another, flowing perfectly off the tongue if you read this aloud. Great use of punctuation too.

    Thank you for entering my contest and good luck
    Shari


  • Icarus Lives
    May 16, 2009

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    One can get lost in such avenues of thought, and why the hell not? It's how we grow. Very effective in a short package.

  • TrippinBTM
    May 15, 2009
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    Really liked the first stanza especially. Nice write.


  • Emmyb gold member
    April 23, 2009

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    interesting idea. great images and unique theme. thanks for the authors notes. well done. thanks for this entry .. emmy


  • Close-Hauled
    April 11, 2009

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    Bugger me, its like youve added a refraction of light into the mirrors, and then extended upon it. wow


  • Nam
    April 3, 2009
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    A nice poem that you have written here.

    -Nam


  • Paloszoo gold member
    March 16, 2009

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    Beautiful take on the word prompt. I'm impressed! Nicely done. Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! I'm honored to have you show your work here!


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    March 12, 2009

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    excellent job with that prompt and the echoing effect you speak of is very creative, i liked it..really well written

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