A black rose with blood on the thorns
as my love for you pours out of my arms
i'm stranded when im not with you
forgotten like a broken toy
but when you surround me
i feel on top of the world
as slowly i lay my head on your shoulder
to take away this pain
continuing into the night
i will never rest
without you by my side
but now the love is broken and all i can do is think
that maybe we shouldnt be here
its being told in the whisper of the wind
that maybe we shouldnt be here
What did you think
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perfect
great poem,great emotions wow love it keep up the work i can relate in a way
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I think this poem is very, very good, Olivia. I love the first two lines.
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oh, thats good 2! very chilling. it leaves u wondering wat will happen next? will they get caught? good job!
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WOW
Your poetry isd great and awsome. I love it I get it. -
Your poetry is really good,
but i think that you need to expand on your vocabulary a little bit. It would add a lot to your poetry
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Good
Wow, Livi. I totally get it. Like I kinda know what you mean -
i love the first two lines...
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Good
I really like this poem. It flows, it has great voice, and its true
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Great
Simply great...ure really talented,keep it up..
My favourite lines are the first two..
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thanx u should read some of my other stuff
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<3
my favorite line: A black rose with blood on the thorns
as my love for you pours out of my arms
u have real talent liv.
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I love this
I really like it. It pops at me and makes me think about my ex which I still am in love with her but o well
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Great Work
Really well done!!Straight from your heart and very Original!!!
Best of Luck for your next
Gaurav
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Good
You have a wonderfully depressing talent that is beautiful and expresses true emotion when it is set out to the world -
thanx so much
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Thi sis a beutiful poem, great write!
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thank you so much this was my second poem but i didnt thinnk i was very good do u have any ideas for omproving my wwriting
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lovely, wow
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