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Emotions

Sitting here tonight
These thoughts keep running wild
To much on my mind
Now It's time to die

Shoving my way through the pain
Doing everything I can to escape
Got to think of another way
Something to save me
Before It's to late

Never in my life have I felt so alone
An emptiness so deep it cuts to the bone
Thoughts of you cross my mind
How could I have been so blind
To wrapped up in what I wanted to be
To see that all you needed was just me

Author notes

I know that reality bites, but I didn’t know it could bite so deep.
Nik Kershaw: Times Like These. #15

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  • Mariana gold member
    April 30

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    You've Been Tagged!

    This is so sad. Be kind to yourself and take a moment to dwell on the good things in life. I know you are going through a rough time. Hang in there...oh and one more thing,
    be kind to yourself. [That is vital ]

    Mariana


  • XxShOoTiNgStArxX
    April 30

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    You've Been Tagged

    Awesum write!! So Deep, I felt like I'm there with you!! Keep up the great work!! Look forward to reading more!!


  • tawk gold member
    April 30

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    "You've Been Tagged"

    LIfe can be so hard at times. And yes reality does bite I know from experience as well. Wonderful and heartfelt write. Keep up the amazing writing, hugs Theresa


  • SubKitten
    April 22

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    Interesting write. The emotional side of this had a good effect on it, and the flow was very effective. Great piece on a whole.


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    April 19

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    Wow, really powerful last lines there!

    It makes an interesting read because the song is actually the opposite of what you've written!!

    (It goes... Times like these I wish I could get on my knees, and somehow put my arms around the world...and make it better.)

    I liked the sense of irony running through this write.

    Something to save me
    Before It's to late

    I think everyone needs that.
    Great work


  • Riftkin gold member
    April 17

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    I enjoyed this poem of yours..
    and want to wish you the best
    with it in my contest.

    As your words have proven to be
    worthy of reading by me and all others.

    Riftkin


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    April 6

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    Powerful
    Life does suck at times, I agree
    A fine sharing in this contest; thank you for being part of it


  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    April 2
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    Great.


  • Reanna Eryn
    March 23
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    I found this beautiful. I love the rhyme! Keep on writing! And good luck!


  • Night Terrors
    March 6

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    Hmm well first things first "I" is a prouper noun and needs to be capiltalized no matter were it falls in a sentence. You need to fix that.

    I love you poem you poured a lot of your heart into this. Loneliness really is a killer I hope you find someone who makes you happy.

    My favorite part was:

    Never in my life have i felt so alone
    An emptiness so deep it cuts to the bone
    Thoughts of you cross my mind
    How could i have been so blind
    To wrapped up in what i wanted to be
    To see that all you needed was just me


    • ley527
      March 6
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      thank you

      thanks for pointing that out, I always forget to make the I's capital. I fixed it


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    March 4

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    Oh, that smarts...

    I am sorry for your hurt. Still, it is nice that you were loved for you. When it's there we sometimes find it hard to accept or believe.

    Nice write. It should fair well in the contest!

  • A-muse-in-writer
    March 1
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    This is so sad but so beautifull crafted. Love this one, I think this is a great write.


  • DeepNThought
    February 28
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    amazzin

    lovely poem i love the line "An emptiness so deep it cuts to the bone" great write

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