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Toxic prayer

There's no love song,
For me anymore,
Nothing to share,
It's too much to bear.

For far too long,
I've been unsure,
Can't breathe this air,
A living nightmare.


Up all nightlong,
There's no cure,
Nothing to declare,
This is a toxic prayer.

What do you think? first write in a long time.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Screaming Chimera
    March 1
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    Thank you,
    don't know if this is a style,
    it was just something i felt comftable with as the end result.

    the ast line came from a random brain storm, unsure where the insperation came from. cheers for the comment and rating though. ^^


  • justlikelivin
    February 28

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    Cool...

    I don't think that I have ever seen this style before, I really enjoy it though . I enjoy the last line to... very cool. 5 stars <3