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Three Years Passing

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Death saturated my sanctum, I died in the river of life, as water ran dry to broken bones. Where sand found me sinking quickly, and dirt blanketed me since birth.

 

As I inhaled darkness, each day I died anew, I realized more I longed for you. Who? Yes, you… The blade of grass that stuck out above miles of sod, those (Facades.)

 

Though your physical death left pang lingering, I shed a tear each year of smiles, only because I know you’re now living. God knows death here was unkind, and walking in the light was only possible for you.

 

As I rewind this tainted tune, it skips on the record player of my soul, the one that’s hollow, and filled to the brim with fatigues venomous voids.

 

Knowledge always fills me with sorrow, and nothingness is what I lay my thoughts upon.

 

Three years and passing, I dedicate my suffering to you, for as you soar high above, or rest in the slumber of no tomorrows, my wings sever with each moment, thinking of the hopes of heaven, or at-least yearning for peace not of this world.

 

A bleeding heart pumps for you on this earthly soil, but may we reunite once again, six feet under, or in the sky of shelter. I love you, yes, you. As I remembered our last dance, three years and passing.

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Portrait By: http://ladysoledad.deviantart.com/gallery/

Thanks Lonely for drawing this for me. It's beautiful.

Write dedicated to my angel up above, Deanna.

I love you, and miss you like coffee cuz. (RIP)

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  • kjack
    March 13

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    Honestly, i don't know how i am typing through these tears. The feelings of loss that i have felt so much in the last few years are all in these words. You have put exactly what it feel like into your poem. Every single day i am reminded of the ones that i loved so very much. I see them in my mind and wonder what they are doing. I love them still. This is a truly soul moving poem.

    becca


  • penman gold member
    March 12
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    excellent

    Another powerful write. So very well expressed. Thank you for sharing

  • Franci
    March 6
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    What a moving poem!
    You enable us to feel just a little of what you are feeling!
    What that tells us is that you are capable of love! Some people aren't. Don't waste that love! You can still give it to someone else without depriving your old love.
    She/he will understand! In Heaven there is no such thing as jealousy!
    Franc

  • Purrsanthema
    March 5

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    the typo piskie gotcha "stanza" 4 fatigues I think should be fatigue's. What a moving write.'I died in the river of write". How powerful a statement! "dirt blanketed me since birth" What a wonderful word-choice : "blanketed". To step back a piece "as water ran dry to broken bones". WOW. To go on: "as I inhaled darkness". What a wonderful word choice : inhaled! Did you notice that internal rhyme in "stanza" 2? Very moving. What would you rather I call it? Stanza? Paragraph? You're the boss here.3:"I shed a tear each year of smiles". I can't go on and comment more. I too have recently suffered a loss. I'll be back later.

  • This is so moving.

    You spook from your heart,  losing someone is so hard. It's hard to find words to express your felling, but you have done an amazing job here.

    May you find peace soon, it never goes away and I don't think we wont it to. But it dose get essayer with time.

    Lots of love your way.

  • anisette
    March 3
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    Amazing!!!


  • Mariana gold member
    March 3
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    Beautiful!

    Mariana  


  • Three Doves
    March 3

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    Beautifully written, your heart speaks volumes of love despite the sadness.

    "knowledge always fills me with sorrow, and nothingness is what I lay my thoughts upon."

    OUTSTANDING!!!!

    Thank you for sharing this with me brother and friend. Misery does love company, thank you for reaching out. God Bless You Tim.
    In God's Love
    Noahy

  • A very touching and moving write, sweet love brother
    I'm sure Deanna is sending you LOTS of love from above
    Love you muches!
    Sister Sandy


  • Emile
    March 3
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    I forgot to give you these, well deserved.

  • Emile
    March 3

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    Sad and touching

    Your words are inspiring and illuminating. A marvelous display of emotions. Very well done with feeling and depth. Your words gently take the reader to your private place and we too can share the warmth within your memory and the love within your heart. The raw emotions within your words capture the heart with their strength of love and truth while devastating the soul with their grief. You call upon an army of emotions to come forth from their slumber and carry you through this ordeal. An outpouring of emotions that surges up from the heart and splashes against the page.


  • LaMerci
    March 3

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    I'm sorry about Deanna...such an elegant, living tribute to her P. Where it counts most, she will never die and your sadness will one day disappear into continued smiles and precious memories.


  • liltulip gold member
    March 3

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    quite lovely

    deep sadness, and yet a love so strong it transcends death....i understand this one more than you will know...thank you for sharing this with us!


  • Titus gold member
    March 3

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    excellent show of spiritual wellbeing, adjoining the senses as I have read and seen here. It is a sad loss, but I feel you have something here inside you, that we are only skimming the words, from which you have concentrated wholy in your being. Lovely gracious prose.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 2

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    oohh so beautifully done Timothy... you chose the words from your heart
    sigh
    so poignant and deep my friend

  • what a touching tale of loving admiration that still lingers beyond ones passing. speaks volumes of deeply personal emotions.

  • I have a hard time writing about people who have died..

    You expressed yourself well here.

  • So Sad but beautiful Makes me think of my grandma who past 5 ears ago.


  • Griswold gold member
    March 2

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    Those that have gone before us prepare the way for our eventual reunion, singing praises to them is all that is left to us, except to love. Well written brother, I share your pain, my cousin Lori is up above waiting for me as well...Scott

  • This is a remarkable poem. Such sadness, but dealt with in such a way that you bring about beauty in the midst of pain.

    I am sorry for your loss, but even in her passing, it is quite evident in what an amazing cousin she left behind. Great work.

  • So very powerful and rings solidly true-

    You have an awesome gift, my new friend. To touch that raw place again and again, each time culling truth, strength and the honest devastation of loss and longing. Keep writing and healing will bring you to a higher place. Many blessings!


  • PureRomance
    March 2

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    awwwww this poem is so sad and full of sadness. I loved reading it. You did an amazing job and *wipes away a tear* The emotions in this are deep and I'm so sorry for your loss. I'm sure she would love this. God bless you always in everything you do and write and keep up the excellent work.


  • 245Trioxin
    March 2

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    i'm sure she'd reprimand you for allowing yourself to suffer over her. anyone in my family would do the same, they'd come back from the grave to slap some sense into me.

    it's not about suffering as much as it is an outpouring of emotion. the same you would have givin in life, only now it has nowhere to go.

    everyday i pray for a birdseye view of this mockery we call life. the view from the valley is less than magnificent.

    those we miss know we do.

    what dreams may come, amigo.


  • queenie
    March 2

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    i remember when this happenened and how devastated you were then. by this i can see that the grief is still fresh. you have written not only the deep emotions you feel in this but the love you still carry for this beautiful person that impacted your life so. three years is just a mere passing of time and it can in no way heal the emptiness you feel by this void. your strength, however can serve as what will carry you through until it's time for the two of you to reunite. be blessed and stay as sweet as you are.


  • couldbeworse
    March 2

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    very touching write. so sorry for your loss. today my g-mom had been gone for almost 14 yrs and its not as easy as some may think. i still think of her often and my g-pop.
    very well done.


  • Angelflower
    March 2
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  • stavykm gold member
    March 2

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    Oh My

    Wow this is so heartbreaking. It is so painful to lose one's you love so dearly. Your poem is just beautiful and you express your emotions and feelings very well. Every word of your poem just pierced my heart knowing all to well the pain of losing a loved one. I'm a bit speechless and I'm so very sorry for your loss. Three years later huh? It's just been 17 months for me and I still feel like I'm going to die from the pain. You are an excellent poet and it was truly an honor to read a piece of your work and heart. Isn't that what poetry is all about?

    Wishing You Many Blessings,
    Much Love,
    Kelle Marie


  • vicisstus
    March 2

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    wow

    very deep, got me thinkin...
    i like this part the most,

    Three years and passing, I dedicate my suffering to you, for as you soar high above, or rest in the slumber of no tomorrows, my wings sever with each moment, thinking of the hopes of heaven, or at-least yearning for peace not of this world.

    i can actually relate to this..maybe not the same...but either way...

    good one!


  • stompsalot
    March 1

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    Nice raw emotion displayed. Gorgeous write on loss and love. I really feel this. It speaks to me, I just need a minute to soak it all in... Very nice.
    blessings and *stomps

  • penman gold member
    March 1

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    Wonderful

    Wow, what an intense write. And so descriptive. You pour out so many emotions. Done so well, thank you for sharing.


  • poeticwaste
    March 1

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    kudos

    Powerful for such a moment in your life. Conveyed alot of feeling and emotions that hit the heart and soul. Nice write.


  • Lonely
    March 1

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    Wow this is a very touching write Tim, for your cousin.. You have the emotions flowing in this one.. Six feet under or in the sky of shelter. Awesome.. A very touchy dedication to your cousin my dear.. Do keep writing and thank you for putting up my drawing

    Love ya so much


  • Wandika gold member
    March 1
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    Feelings exposed

    Sadness understood
    Take care.


  • DesolatELifE
    March 1
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    All I have to say is that it's wonderful. There is lots to say, but not so many words.


  • JinSays gold member
    March 1
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    Ooh, this is so lovely in it's utter sadness.
    Beautifully done.
    Love,
    jin


  • justgot2loveme
    February 28

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    " Three years and passing, I dedicate my suffering to you "

    Wow that's really deep, very emotional and sad.
    I know how you feel, loss is so hard to deal with, the heartache I have felt so I can sure relate to this piece. You wrote it so well, what an amazing person you are. Beautiful and touching and somewhat bittersweet. Excellent poetry.

    Justgot2loveme


  • weaverwonderland
    February 28

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    My Dear Son,
    The word legacy comes to mind. You write carefully how you feel. I read the same way.The reason you feel so much loss, is your ability to feel so much love. Keep feeling.
    Love Dad

  • weaverwonderland
    February 28
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    Beautiful!!!!

    Son,
    Did you discribe how we feel or what. Yes she tried and gave of herself, with nothing back and you are right, God said enough. She is now with Jesus, the one she served faithfully and she sure is enjoying life to the fullest and getting all the love she craved for and was hard to find. But the one she loved was you and when we talked long into the morning, she was always concerned about you. I got to call Tim, was her next thing to do. You and her understood each other, like no other. Soon you and her will get to spend all the time you want, forever and ever. She loved Timmy also and rememberd all the cute things he would say to her.
    She would love this poem as she would read your poems and say Aunt Alice, he has got great talent. Yes, this poem is just awesome and I can hear her with so much excitement say it now. We miss her so. Talked to her mom and she will never get over her. She would love the line, God knows death here was so unkind and walking in the light was only possible for her. Thanks honey for sharing this wonderful poem. Mom


  • raggyann
    February 28

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    this was just so very amazing
    this i felt inside my heart

    you made it shine with
    love and emotions


  • poet2angels gold member
    February 28

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    Oh, Bro x 1000
    I am sorry for your loss ...I can feel your pain in every line, sweet friend...
    She is looking down at you with love and pride

    Lynda


  • HopelessScribbles gold member
    February 28

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    aw this is sad, my sweet friend, I know it is difficult to accept a loved ones passing,it is hard,
    when you had a close relationship, she would have loved this,in her life...
    MM


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    February 28

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    Beautiful tribute. Your words very touching and filled with loving expressions. Thanks for the share.


  • Mozarts funeral gold member
    February 28

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    Awwww **hugs** You're an amazing writer, lyricist whatever you want to call yourself. Your pen, your words, connect so strongly!! thank you for sharing this. I do appreciate it.

  • gypsyjo
    February 28

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    Bittersweet

    Time and tears can't fill the void left by a loved one's passing. I love the line "God knows death here was unkind, and walking in the light was only possible for you.", how sweet and true for those of us left behind to grieve. Even knowing that one day we will see them again provides little comfort in the moments we are missing them. Your words have aptly described grief's hunger that will never be filled in this present world.


  • Jalalbad gold member
    February 28

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    Poeticweaver your great at just writing your feelings freed from rhym and verse. O how I can relate to you here more than you know...


    P.s. You have the ability to write a book


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    February 28

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    An exquisite piece that shows you truly love and miss the person up there looking down on you.

    Exquisite word choice to actually make us feel the emotion - almost as much as you

    Shari


  • Rose Angel gold member
    February 28

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    Ah.....your soul speaks out in such pain, such love for your cousin. Ever lingering in your heart, you entwine your sorrow, and longing...There is not one poem I have read with such a cherished love as these words of imagery."I dedicate my suffering to you, as you soar high above". Such utter devotion here...Magnificently painful, loving penning....Such a moving write..


  • lolagirl
    February 28
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    beautiful


  • going nowhere
    February 28

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    beautifully written, and obviously touching everyone that reads it. you write so well of the pain and loss that i can feel it... and there is so much love and hope in this that it cant but make tears come to my eyes thinking about those i love...


  • poetryrocksmysox
    February 28

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    Two things are very clear here, you love your angel, and you are such a talent to express suck love and pain. May you find peace everlasting, and know she's looking down upon you with more love that you can imagine. Beautiful on many levels. Sorry for your loss. Love K. Peace.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    February 28

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    always a pleasure reading you especially pieces you speak from your heart with. Glad to see you sent a shout out to your angel.

    Love
    Tory


  • Howard Manser gold member
    February 28

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    PASSIONATE

    Very discriptive, well painted and organized from beginning to end. Thank You, it was a wonderful read. -Howard


  • myrataal silver member
    February 28

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    It is a write totally different from your ordinary style ...

    and it touched my heart. However, I read more gain than loss in this recollection: beautiful memories of a beautiful person. Thank you, Timmy, for sharing your feelings in such a brilliant way.

    Love
    Myra

  • Rala
    February 28

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    I'm so sorry. Such a beautiful write. thank you for sharing this, it really takes a good poet to put greif into words. I hope the passing days bring you happiness and consolation. I know what you are going through, and I hope things will get better for you.


  • Stardust-luvr
    February 28

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    my dearest your words of pain and sorrow bring tears shared to embrace you and the family with al my love heart and soul. I know how much it hurts not having Deanna here with you upon soddened ground to share your joys laughter and tears but my dearest know she is one of your guardian angels who watches over you with the purest of love and admires the man you are and have grown to be shining light in woven mastery above darkened eclipses of disdain and burdens. You are loved and the memories shall forever be tombed in your mind and heart to live as true precious treasures. welldone hun and know I am here if you need me. much love and many blessings always xxxxxx


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    February 28

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    So beautiful and intensely painful. It's difficult. You never get over it, you never "move on" really. But eventually it seems you have more good days than bad, and it gets a little easier to do every day, normal things.

    But every once in a while, something brings their memory back full force and how it hurts! How every nerve ending screams with the agony of loss.

    These feelings are very difficult to write, nearly impossible to describe with any grace - yet you accomplished that beautifully here.

    I'm sorry for your loss, friend. I'm grateful, however, that you could transform that immense and immeasurable grief into a brililant work of art that helps heal us all.

    Thank you.

  • very heart felt mushy you really put a lot into you words here they are very moving honey


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    February 28

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    i knew this was coming. terry's death is five years come monday and i have been writing about it lately. i am so sorry timothy, i know what you are going through right now. thank you for being here still. viyanna rosemarie


  • poeticpieces
    February 28

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    Amazing Dad. I know how much you love her, as well as she loved you, and I miss her so much too. She was not only family, but a true friend to all the hurting. She would understand this write more than anyone else, for she knew your heart, and the love that resides within you. I love you Daddy, and I'm glad I'm blessed with you as a father. You always treated her with tender, loving care. I know she's so precious to you, and many who cherish her angelic ways. You two made a great team, as a matter of fact, remember those volleyball games we'd all play at the park in the sand by the beach... We always won, haha. We all had so much fun together, she knew of all the hot spots to go to, she's the best cousin/friend we could ever ask for. This write explains how much you really care, as well as how hard life is while living. I'm glad we have each other. Love your son, Timothy Jr. aka poeticpieces. Some roses for my cuz.


    • poeticweaver gold member
      February 28

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      I love you as well my precious son, you are my light from day to day, she knew that, and loved you as well so much, as you already know. I miss her so much, and the times we had. Remember the movies and CD's we'd watch, we had so many laughs. I guess that's all I have of her now my son, but life goes on, and on. Thanks for loving me, you make life worth the living. You understand me so well, because you listen to me, and care about what I'm saying. You have such a compassionate soul. How I love and treasure you so. Love Daddy!

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