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The Attack

You find me at the
slightest sign of weakness.
You reach deep inside my body
to turn up the heat.
You punch my stomach
until I'm nauseous.
You twist my arms
until it's weak.
You pin me down
and I can only shake.
You whisper gruesome lies
that fill me up with fears.
I scream, I cry, I run away,
but you'll be back again. 

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  • carlylane
    May 2
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    Chilling.

    I absolutely loved it... the description was amazing.


  • bobanonymous gold member
    May 2
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    fear is a bummer

    thanks for entering my contest!

  • hunkydoryinoc
    March 13

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    I really like this poem...I have read most that you have posted and for lack of a better word at the moment "enjoyed" them all


  • Larkinabout
    March 1

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    Great job!

    It all flowed well because there were no awkward parts. Does the poem refer to an actual person or to something else? Anyway, it was certainly interesting and succint.


    • robotinpurgatory
      March 1
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      i suffer from severe panic attacks and this was a personification poem about my attacks. and thank you


  • Ameterasu
    March 1

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    like all whats wicked and evil...forever watching...waiting...seeking the chance...the slightest crack...to feed...to hunt...flesh and bones...blood and emotions...all whats alive...to get alive...

    i like it

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