She's comfy,
on the couch,
watching the news, like always.
He just left for a trip,
be back in one week.
She doesn't know if she'll be able to last that long without him.
Flipping aimlessly through the channels,
when she eyes one of the towers up in smoke.
She freezes.
Pulling out her phone,
she dials his number.
He really shouldn't be up there,
she thinks,
watching reporters run around like
cockroaches on the ground.
His voice comes on.
Heard about this? she asks.
He hasnt.
She starts explaining,
when he yelps.
His voice instantly,
turned shrill.
Honey,
he said.
I love you, but-
the phone went dead,
right as she saw a second
plane fly into the towers.
Hello?
Hello?
she started to sob,
realizing,
he's not coming home.
Author notes
again, another assignment. this time it had to be about a historical thing that happened. My dad helped out with 9/11, so this is what i wrote about.
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wow this was sad it gave a imgae that was just amazing but at the same time sad.
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ahha, you're seriously making me smile. i have to get off real soon, but i promise to comment on your poems!
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This is sad, but it was nice of you to portray such an event like that. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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thank you! (:
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Wow. This is really nice. Good metaphor, good...just good.
Thanks for the entry.
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thank you very much!
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wow , well done
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thank you,
very much! =)
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This is probably my FAVORITE of your's. It's so amazing and sad.. It gave me shiver's and almost made me cry. Thank you, Amanda. This was one of the best poem's i've read in a longgggg time, no lie, gurrrl.
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thanks so much!!
that makes me feel real real happy.
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Aww
I almost started crying. This is beautiful the way you wrote it. Thank you for such a terricfic write.
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thank you for commenting.
yea, the whole tragedy really stuck out at me and made me really sad.
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awwwwwwwwwww
very touching and sad. Yes this event destroyed homes, lives and changed a nation. Great write and welcome to AP. God bless you, Mark
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thanks for the comment! it means a lot =)
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