hey mister! what's it like to get knocked out in the first round?
call me chuck.
but you're a man, and i'm not supposed to use first names. daddy says it is disrespectful.
i'm not a man.
well? did it hurt?
oh. yeah. it hurts like hell, kid. but its all worth it. you gotta take a few knocks when you're not very good. it builds character.
are you afraid to die up there?
if something kills me today, it won't be some fucker's fist; it'll be your goddamn incessant questions. why aren't you talking to the winner of the fight? there's nothing exciting i can tell you.
what does incessant mean?
you're a real golden boy, aren't you? incessant is something spry. it wants something from you, and it keeps coming until it gets it. remember the first two minutes of the fight? it looked like those blue gloves weren't going to get off my chest until they broke through and pulled all my insides out. it felt like i'd never breathe again, like i'd just keep being broken through the ribs until there was nothing left in the middle of me.
my questions did that?
more. fists break spirits; words start wars, kid. what are you smiling about?
you said you couldn't teach me anything. you just didn't feel like breaking my spirit.
you're an ass of a kid. you should be a journalist.
A contest entry
- anatomy by autarky.
1500 points, ended April 13, 12 entries
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Hides her press pass and slinks away...
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charlie is witty in a way i can only imagine. well.. he sounds like someone from a movie. not sure who yet, i'll get back to you
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Charlie just became a hero of mine.
I don't even have enough words to describe how amazing this piece is.
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hahahah Oh dear lordie.....
You do dialogue like no one else I know. I've read all of them, but I never comment. They're brilliant. Seriously.
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you know i love this.
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lol, this sounds like a clint eastwood movie to me
him or vin diesel... big difference i know, but i kinda lump them into the same group o_0
-cassidy
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lol. i was going for bukowski meets hemingway.
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i've been reading a little whitman, all because of you! but i don't like him as much as sandburg, at least not yet
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ive been reading a lot more sandburg now because of you, and i think i know what you mean
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This is outrageous and so god damn natural! LOVED IT!!!!!!
Marc
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thank you!
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SHIT!
Render me in too much awe for life.
"call me chuck."
I had to think of Chuck Taylors.
"i'm not a man."
GOD. Your answers to this questions are brief, perfect, and fuck...ing awesome.
"if something kills me today, it won't be some fucker's fist; it'll be your goddamn incessant questions."
"if something kills me today" <==what a great opener for witty dialogue. I MUST USE THIS IN REAL LIFE.
"incessant is something spry."
Frickety dick.
"you're an ass of a kid. you should be a journalist."
Mother of god I LOVELOVELOVELOVE YOU.
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Jessica
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everyone loveloveloveloves me.
im just a badass
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lol I so enjoyed this, the timbre of the voice is priceless and I wanted this to just keep going.Wonderful
C
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i love this...
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