Through the darkest hours spent
alone; cheeks wet with tears
Fiendish presence, dementia's laugh,
the nightmare is that you're awake...
Pleading whispers with upturned eyes,
hope lays in divinity's grace
Powerless, or so it seems,
in the talons of demons' embrace
Within the darkness' choking grip,
a messenger appears
Form that's bathed in Heaven's Light,
flaming brand within his hand
Not the Lord, nor angels sent
his form is that of man,
No wings protrude; no haloed head;
yet blinding light stabs darkness' eyes
His whispers pierce what once was black,
as terrors howl in helpless rage
"The power you need is within yourself...
the Power is your faith"
Author notes
Knowing of the power within is the first step in defeating the darkness of the cage...belief that The Lord grants the power (to those who truly believe in Him) to vanquish that darkness is the power that unlocks it
Prompt:
Oh God ! make me free from the cage of darkness...Unknown.
A contest entry
- the cage... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended March 9, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is wonderful, yet some of us have a darkness that seems to not let go. Your words can give hope to those that look for the light.
Riftkin
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Indeed a strong faithfilled piece.
Amazing work
Passions
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You pen the dark genre with such skill and emotion. I think this is captivating.
Love,
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Wow!!
Oh My Word~ this is one Powerful piece my Brother and You had me in tears
I was reading and the energy was building
Excellent this is and what a message with deep meaning~ resonates to the core~
Love this and both You also Your other half
[the honorable Sandy]Woooo Hoooo
Elated to see that quill dance
Thank You for sharing Your Talent & Heart
Best wishes in all You do Precious Spirit
with love & light~ Desire~*~
Your Sissy poooooooooooooooooo
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Yes! Just wonderful. I love the power in your last verse.
An excellent poem indeed.
Gaylene
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What a wonderful statement of faith penned in a beautiful quatrain. I think line four is exceptionally profound. Great work!
Love,
Amera♥
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Amen!
This is an exceptionally brilliant poem, the last two lines sum up what it takes to vanquish the dark cage in which so many find themselves: Faith in God. Were it not for Him, I would not be alive today; for Satan as attempted to kill me so many times and, as I mentioned earlier, I call upon God and Christ, my avengers.
This glorious piece is surely deserving of GOLD!
Luv & hugs, BonnieQ
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the power is yoiur faith..and the faith itself is the healing connection which makes us enlightendd as well..you are quite true while making the point valid through the poetry...
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a coincidence
I read this after I submitted my own poem but I do see much similarity in feeling and tone. We read the prompt the same, I think.
Nevertheless, your poem is wonderful. It is so well written with a touch of mystery but still understandable. I like it a lot.
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Excellent! I enjoyed reading this. The last two lines tied in nicely.
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Babe, this is wonderfully written!!! So proud to see ink spill from that talented pen of yours
Geez, when you said you were writing, I should've expected something good
Wishing you the best in this contest...love ya!!!
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