How dare you desicrate the love we shared
engraved so deeply into each of our hearts
how dare you massacre the feelings we felt
by ripping and tearing our love free!
So young and innocent, so special the feeling
our moments tendered into Heaven's oblivion
now pouring free, losing all its momentum
drained away in one impulsive beat!
Scarred forever, a thorn permantly implanted
as a reminder of all the pain we had endured
how did we fail so misserably sharing love
what does life hold for us now?
Author notes
I credit the owner of the picture. For_The_Heart_I_Once_Had_by_archania for inspiration.
Togetherness is nice, memory is consoling, love is forever! Celebrate each day as if it were Valentines. Rose
A contest entry
- 4 winners, 20 entries, I picture that tells a thousand words by SeaWithYourHeart.
875 points, ended March 12, 12 entries
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Comments
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I love the way the anger is fored and flowing together. i loved the language you used to convey your feelings. and i overall thought it was a great poem well done thanks for entering
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ilike the word chioce very nuch. i especially like how you chose "massacre" for what the person is doing to your feelings. or whoevers feelings were to display;your uncertainess in the last stanza is displayed nicely, and everything here is very good. a used topic, but a very good write. i think u should have won o.o
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Good
This poem is well written and presents an original viewpoint of a woman experiencing a flood of emotions while reviewing her failed love. An outpouring of emotions that surges up from the heart and splashes against the page.
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