The rolling sea
drew winters from
the ship's deck.
You breathed a
kimono of smoke
and waved with
religious fingers.
Author notes
Prompt: goodbye
20 words
A contest entry
- 10/20 quicky, bring your own prompt by Meroza.
400 points, ended February 28, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
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Sos hort yet so powerful. Truly a great piece. I really liked the religious fingers bit. Awesome job, poet. Best wishes to you and thanks so much for your comment on my piece.
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Your breathed a>> You breathed a???
i liked this... congrats on the gold win, wow you are a real rockstar!
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and again, thank youuu! i love that you noticed it!! i cannot believe i missed it. i suck at double-checking!
hahaha.
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Congrats on your gold, kimono of smoke wow that's cool C
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aw wow this so deep and
congratulations on your shiny
maralisa
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NOoooooo, you cant go anywhere.
Look at that lovely girl there, what ever would we do without her?
Absolutely wonderful, my darling girl.
You've given your old Mama some inspiration I was sorely lacking
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Love and congratulations on your lovely trophy, though I am so not surprised anymore
Love,
jin
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Such great image your words leave me with
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Good lord, you're good. Stunning in it's imagery pet. I love this one too Best to you in the contest
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Lovely, fresh imagery used to paint this thoughtful abbreviated word picture. Well done.
Dennis
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Ah, very classical and picturesque.
Nicely penned.
All the best and with much love,
mj.
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Awesomeness.
Good imagery.
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Took me on a little trip, you "brung your game" to this- such nice imagery...
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