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Spiritless Sigh

Unseen, veiled visions surrender
within midnights final sigh
moments captured inside time
dance softly as they pass by.

Unable to wither or perish
these droplet holding dreams
glide along immortal
shielded and supreme.

Silent bonds remain unbroken
even death struggles to sever
woven tight within the webs
spiritless and forever.


Author notes

prompt 1: http://elenadudina.deviantart.com/art/Entre-velas-y-velos-114186381

50 Words exact.

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Comments

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  • Firequeen
    April 11

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    Oh this is amazing
    Such wonderful imagery
    you took us on a dark but wonderful journey with your words.
    keep the ink flowing
    Fire


  • azlyn gold member
    March 3

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    This is just wonderful!!! I loved every word and line...this background and border are just simply magical. Congrats on the much deserved Silver!!!


    Az


  • Mariana gold member
    March 1

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    I love the rhyming flow to this, not to mention the beautiful imagery expressed. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.

    Mariana  


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    March 1

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    Love this...

    Always great to see new writing from you, always a treat to savour, and this is no exception...
    Strong narrative, rhythm, rhyme & flow...
    And great take on the prompt...
    Well done!!!


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    March 1

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    Wow
    A wonderful poem that is etched with such feelings
    Good luck in the contest hun
    Julie x


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 1

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    Damn! More than tried.. nailed it! i love your take on this picture hunny. The thought of being stuck there.. stranded... spiritless... very dark!

    So great to see a poem from you!!! Awesome!


  • Maxboy gold member
    February 28

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    Very nice take on the prompt sweetie.

    Best wishes in the contest


  • doolie gold member
    February 28

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    A wonderful write filled with imagery. Love your background, hun.
    Best of luck in the contest.


  • crimsondew
    February 28
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    Wow

    Stunning imagery here...so different and tasteful...

    All the best in the contest!


  • maralisa silver member
    February 28

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    aw a very beautiful poem your imagery and depth throughout is wonderful my freind good luck in the contestmaralisa


  • PastelMoons gold member
    February 28

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    Great work on the prompt
    It's a beautiful picture
    and you've penned beautiful words
    to go right along with it..
    Good luck in the contest
    P>s I love the bg too

    ~Pastel

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